Remebering What Inspiration Is

Remebering What Inspiration Is

A Poem by maryjaneuy
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about our moms. :)

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On that day
In bed I lay
You said I was a gift
With no BUTs and IFs
You gave me name
And that stays the same
I face life without fears
'Cause I'm with you for so many years
I learned many things
In which life brings
You are always there
You show me that you care
Through thick and thin,
To you I always lean
Thanks for everything
Because of you I can now do anything
Mom, thank you
For being my inspiration.
For being my role model.
For being my guardian.
And now I'm taking this chance to say,
You mean every little thing to me.
I love you.


© 2010 maryjaneuy


Author's Note

maryjaneuy
Another work of mine. Hope you like it. :)

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A beautiful poem for your mother. No stronger or better love then the love of your mother. I like the description and the very good ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


Congrats on your great winning poem! I knew the first time I read this it was a winner.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I can just see the pride on your mother's face. Well done young poet well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


aww! This was a sweet poem u wrote 4 ur mom! I bet it brought tears to her eyes when she read it. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Adorable! I think this would make a great mother's day halmark card! :) I love the flow of this piece too. Great poem :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


beautifully penned. Respect, I like it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


your mum wud hav been so glad 2 read this!! :))) i wanna write one for my mum tooo... I liked d poem bt mayb it cud hav been better... but anyways it says want u wantd 2 convey very well!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I definitely like it. Good job.
And, I can see that many others like it as well :P

Posted 14 Years Ago


Hey there! I think this is my first review on any of your works. I'll tell you firsthand that I assess both the content and the technicals of a written piece. :D

For content, I find it wonderful that your mom is your inspiration. I may not have the best relationship with my mom but I cannot agree more of what is written here.Our mothers were blessed with so many things: a keen mind, a strong will, a loving heart, and gentle hands. Our mothers are technically the superheroes of our lives. For technicals, I commend you for flow for it is so natural. I found it quite disappointing though that your rhyme scheme faltered at the end. I loved it from from line 1 to line 16. If you'd consider my suggestion, place line 17 to the last line in the author's note. The 16 lines stands as inspiration in itself. Another technical nit-pick is that you should break it up; four lines per stanza. Final nitpick,
"You gave me name"
-turn it to 'you gave me a name' so it would compliment the meter in the next line.

Overall, this is one great write! Keep writing. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is amazing, i enjoyed this write

Posted 14 Years Ago



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