Silence

my first poem.. however its more a recollection of my thoughts :)

Voices in my head scream louder than my words

Feelings buried would forever be unheard

Broken thrusts and disappointments 

Forgetting life's own enjoyment'

Won't forget the days I spent in school

Figuring out what I really wanted to do

Was it me threw it all away?

Was it me that decided not to stay?

If I make my way back now I shall be lost

If I lose myself right now, I sure won't hold. 

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Don't lose yourself! This is a very nice write! Good job!

[Maria M]

haha i'll try not to :) Thanks Chris :D :D

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

expressive and flew well... But would be better if metered :)

[Maria M]

Thank you for your review Adam, and yes I agree :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

thank you for writing

[zainul]

Expressed your feelings very well.

[Maria M]

Thanks so much Zainul! :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome,lovely poetess! :)

[Tracey C.]

This is wonderful =) Well-written; short, but sweet.

[Maria M]

Thanks you so much Tracey C. Its much appreciated :D

[Tracey C.]

You are very welcome! =))

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Trapped eitherway...or found the destination anyway.
Memories teach valubale lessons for the future to hold..
Surpressed feelings and residual emotions...
Voices in your head...yes so i know..
i feel so too at times.
thx Maria..cheers to the good times!

[Maria M]

Memories may remind you of your mistakes but at least they teach you a lesson, together with mistakes I suppose.

Thank you poetry-kiddo for reviewing, i'm glad you liked it

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes i did missy

[Chris]

Use your poetry to focus your thoughts...

[Maria M]

I try but I haven't written a poem in such a long time. But i'll try I promise!

Thanks for your comment :)

[Chris]

Poetry will help you express your emotions. You're welcome.

[krish]

such a nice poem....even i'd like to say that it;s not just a poem...I''s merely a REALTY that shows real truthness........i loved it much than others...,so..i wanna Ggive u this time 87/100....if u b don't mind then can i've say sth to u .........
let's have a look below:-)
"SILENCE THAT CAN't AVOIDANCE,
IF I WANNA MY LIFE BACK,THEN IT SOUND;S LIKE A CREATION OF VIOLENCE,
IF I LOSE MYSELF RIGHT NOW,THEN WHERE'S MY ARROGENCE,
THE WORD SILENCE SHOWS TO KNOW ALL ABOUT IT'S FIGURANCE + FRAGRANCE,WITHOUT ANY HINDRANCE.........."
"IF U WANNA ASK ,THAT WHT'S A SILENCE,
THEN I'D LIKE TO SAY THAT SILENCE IS SILENCE THAT INFLUENCE OUR'S ALONNESS,
COZ......IT CAN'T BE IGGNORANCE,
IT'S ALWAY'S APPEAR'S WHEN THING'S CONVERTED INTO NATURAL-DISSAPEARANCE,
OUR'S LONLEYNESS IS ALL ABOUT SILENCE,
THAT SCREAMING US WHENEVER WE BECOME SO VIOLENCE;
SILENCE SOMETIMES HELP'S US TO MAKE + BRING NEW THINGS WITH OUR ALLOWANCE,
INFLATION IN SILENCE, HELP'S TO KNOW BETTER ABOUT HIMSELF + OUR SELFNESS + FOOLISHNESS;
COZZZZZZZZZZZZ.........
IT'S ALL ABOUT SILENCE.....SILENCE......SILENCE.............
"WHEN A STUDENT MAKES NOISE IN HIS/HER CLASSROOM WITH FINANCE;
TEACHER SAY'S ; PAY ATTENTION, IT'S NOT UR'S HOME RESISTANCE........"
SO..I'D SAY......IT'S ALL ABOUT SILENCE..........SILENCE........SILENCE............

[Maria M]

Thank you for reviewing! :)

and I do agree with you, silence does bring about loneliness but I don't mind being alone, i'm quite used to it actually!

Thanks again.

[krish]

YEAH....but that's only for make a line.....that's why i did use a word alone...

[Pradeep Nair]

It's good.
"Broken thrusts and disappointments " emphasizing the human life.

'If I make my way back now I shall be lost
If I lose myself right now, I sure won't hold'

I feel salt in my eyes.

You say you are 18. but how could you write as if you are 30?

[Maria M]

Thank you for your comment Pradeep, its is very much appreciated :)

This was the first piece of writing I have written after almost 2 years of writers block so I have to admit its not my best work!

And yes I am 18 !! :)

Thanks again ! :D