BLaTtAv3lli (Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D)

BLaTtAv3lli (Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D)

A Poem by mattavelli
"

my first collaboration

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BLaTtAv3lli 
Mattavelli & BLitZ3D

Car bombs shake a city to the brink. 
Generals analyze it and think
It's time to go to war. 
Leave there entire race extinct
Church bells shake inside 
There strategy they rethink
Machine guns rattle in the streets.
A bullet cares not whom it meets.
It's gruesome work is done.
Bleeding sons lay dead like cattle from the heat
The pin f*****g pull it, flying chunks of meat 
Hoodlums and I.E.D's lead a reluctant retreat
Missiles launch from ships at sea;
Who is there that honestly
Can say what's right and wrong.
Drones approach, through the air silently 
Waiting they stare, just waiting but there their
Out of sight but bombs range long
All nations join the game.
The world is not the same.
It hits us all at home
A military police state
Our flag in flames
An outcome we should have known 
With a flash of light
No one's left to fight. 
A city's turned to dust.
An explosion of pearls
The harbor it rusts
Hiroshima reincarnated, the actions of flight
No more ideals.
No more appeals.
Just burn the whole thing down.

The radiations real
The isotopes peel
Turned into a nuclear playground 

© 2015 mattavelli


Author's Note

mattavelli
http://www.writerscafe.org/blitzed
this link will take you to BLitZeD's page.

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At war with Mr. BLitZ3D? I'll go check it out. This was powerful! Is this your first poem, or just collaboration? They're their there.

Posted 2 Years Ago


mattavelli

2 Years Ago

First collaboration - I enjoyed it. :)
Hooray!! First collab! Nice job to both. I hope to see more!

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Cherry. :)
Cherry Pepperweb

8 Years Ago

You are kindly welcome my friend. :)
"There strategy they rethink"
there should be their in line 6...in line 17 it should be they're there...

this is a very potent poem and also thought provoking in our current political climate...my favorite lines are...Machine guns rattle in the streets.
A bullet cares not whom it meets.

overall excellent

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, Jeannemarie.
I think BLitZ3D cares more about the sound than the spellin.. read more
jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

their is possessive so it works better in line six...there is location word as you used it in line 1.. read more
mattavelli

8 Years Ago

But I didn't write those lines. Haha
Sounds to me like it could be a song. I almost sense a rap song. I can hear it, I actually hear someone rapping the intensity of the lyrics. Sorry if that sounds strange!!!! Great job to both of you. :) xo

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Thanks Andrea. :)
Vary nice wording!
Great job both of you!

Posted 8 Years Ago


What a war, there are no winners in such a battle. Well done, good collaboration. :) Rudi

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Rudi. Im enjoying the collaborations. :)
A story intertwined into a dramatic poem. I see the terror and fear within your lines, I picture every movement in your words. I feel as though the structure of your poem intensifies the meaning of war you are expressing. The "playground" is the arena for a war that never seems to cease.
Great piece!
-Yanina

Posted 8 Years Ago


What we have here is aggression that is just a wee bit out of control according to my way of thinking. We have reached a point in the development of armaments that if jointly initiated by both or all sides would or could lead to a possible Armageddon. I do not believe that that is what the people of the world want.
Aggression needs a pacifier.
The world needs a better way before we all find out that it is too late to matter.

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Thanks for reading. Ya, we shouldn't kill each other. :)
Awesome power!! I really liked it!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Hey, it was fun, my first collaboration.
marcus

8 Years Ago

I like political poems!
mattavelli

8 Years Ago

I wasn't trying to make a political statement. I just wanted to write about destroying the world. I .. read more
...obviously im going to rate it 100

Posted 8 Years Ago


mattavelli

8 Years Ago

Nice, up my rating!

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