Ballade for Denial

Ballade for Denial

A Poem by mattavelli
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Ballade

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Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

© 2016 mattavelli



Author's Note

mattavelli
I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

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Wow!....Seriously.....no words could justify the sensation I have after reading this. The rhythm is great, the musicality is fantastic, the imagery is strong, and it simply tells a great story. Even the refrains hit the right notes!! Well done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


mattavelli

4 Months Ago

Hello, emi! :)
After two weeks of receiving no reviews, i get five from you within an hour. T.. read more
emipoemi

4 Months Ago

The pleasure was all mine.
Lately I'm not adventurous with trying new forms & I'm not familiar with the ballade, but here you've done such a bang-up job with rhythm & rhyme, I kinda want to try one myself someday. I like that all your expressions are filled with originality & I like the way there's a bit of venom seeping thru-out this vehement little rant. The first stanza is especially good as far as the message & structure. I love this line: "go hang from your damned sugarchain of coaxes" . . . a prime example of your nicely tempered rant.

Posted 5 Months Ago


mattavelli

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Barleygirl! :)
The ballade was fun to write. The rhyme was a challenge. Give it a .. read more
Reading this again. Same rhyme repeating each stanza. Love that. I have one or two like this. The meter is precise. Like that, too. To me more important than the rhyme. Combined, very nice indeed. Most difficult and highly structured. This takes extreme discipline and creativity. My only (very small) quibble is that lots of the rhymes are properly internal rhymes and not rhymes at the ends of a thought (sentence or clause). In the strictest of forms, I prefer to see those written as the internal rhymes that they are. But still, my God, this is very nice, and as captivating as before. Not many on WC could even approach a write such as this. If I just consume this whole, I am refreshed and deeply satisfied. Wonderful job. No change in my high rating.

My very best regards, and I'm sorry I have been a stranger to your writes.

Rick

Posted 9 Months Ago


mattavelli

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Rick! :)
Someone once commented that he liked my use of enjambments. So, I looked .. read more
Rick Puetter

9 Months Ago

Yep, this is certainly a stylistic choice, isn't it? Not my preference, but others are free to have.. read more
Wow indeed! i echo D. Connolly's review .. to produce this in such fine ballade form in just one sitting tells me the rattling around for a week or so was well worth the patience .. well done says i! a real blessing to read ..so relateable .. and bigger than life perspective tells my empathetic self to resist trying to console such a one ..just offer to sit in silence with a friends deep gloom .. just really good stuff my friend!! can't say it enough
E.

Posted 9 Months Ago


mattavelli

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Einstein! :)
You caught my meaning perfectly.
This was a fun poem to write.. read more
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

i have tried a couple of sonnets and one far east ancient form in collaboration with Zahra ..and hai.. read more
Wow, this speaks volumes, and is very relatable. I kind of read the 1st part like there was one person trying to make me feel better, and I just wasn't hearing it. Then the 2nd part it was as if it was directed at the person who caused the pain in the first place. Mmmm, "yearning's sheath"; I like that. It makes me think of how tempting it is to exact vengeance. Overall, to me it speaks of love's hope, and those jerks that just don't take care of it. We all have a monster, just don't feed it too much, ok?

Posted 11 Months Ago


mattavelli

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and the feedback, D! :)
Another masterful creation Sir. As your authors note suggests, sometimes having such a thought playing in the back burner of your mind, toying with the thought before reaching for the pen, surprises us with how so freely the words flow onto the page, so effortlessly. And reads so perfectly like a ballade too. Bravo.

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Nemo! :)
This one was a lot of fun to write. Have you tried the ballade form?
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Very strong words and meaning.....and cleverly written describing vengeance!

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading, Hebe! :)
Really made me think! I love love when poems make you think deeply!

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading, Love! :)
This is brilliant! Kept me intrigued right to the end, and I am glad I did. It is a fantastic read, well built and I do love the words you have chosen. Keep writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading, Willa! :)

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