Sonnet for the Sophie Dog

There was never a squirrel hound with more skill,

But her talent has gone unused for years.

She pouts at the window, sad eyes with tears,

Watching the tree-rats and wanting to kill.

 

I’d love to let her, but still never will.

To have her diseased is one of my fears.

So I try to get her mind to switch gears,

But soon she’s back with her paws on the sill.

 

Though I can’t help that the world does tease her

With excitement and delicious pleasure,

I do my best to give her some relief.

 

So I grab the bacon from the freezer

And tempt her with this odorous treasure,

Which she snatches like a tail-wagging thief.

 

 

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very solid writing. Sonnets can be such a britch to write, but you make it look really easy. Your slighly sloppy form is very appropriate for a slightly sloppy dog. Your 11 syllables in the first sentence wsa a bit disconcerting, but it is not so much about perfection in form as it is about relaying the story and appropriately representing your subject material. I think that this somewhat slack form does the trick! Good job!

-Gabe

[Unbrokenkiss]

Very cute! It's wonderfully adorable. I'd never think that a story about a dog could be portrayed that way, but it certainly was a fun read. I can just picture a dog at the window sill, looking out at the squirrels. Haha. Very well done.

[Vital Signs 13]

This is so cute :)

[Adela Muresan]

:D .
I like it.

A.M.

[Gordon]

Haha... Gave me a good laugh. Can I mail some bacon to Sophie? I feel sorry for the little pooch. Nice rhyming and story telling.

[Angel's Lady]

So I grab the bacon from the freezer
And tempt her with this odorous treasure,
Which she snatches like a tail-wagging thief.

haha I love this piece! Great job! You have made something so simply a real joy to read.

[HoorayForUnderdog]

I dont know a sonnet from a sombrero but I did love this poem! A sweet tribute to your best friend.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This is a very charming piece. Very loving toward your dog and shows caring nature. For this contest I'm looking for poems that will wake the concious of man. I'm sorry your poem doesn't fit the critiria for this poem. But I do appriciate you entering. Thanks.

[Emily Rose]

This is a refreshingly non-serious poem! That's not to say that it's not well-written; it is - but it's really nice to not have to read about the "blackness of my soul" for once. It's really nice to see that a good poet can turn something as ordinary as the conundrums of his or her dog into something poetic and pleasant to read. My only comment is that the abrupt rhythm change in the ninth line is a bit jarring, but the that's the turn so I think I see what you were trying to do. By the way, the rhyme scheme is also quite inventive - I really like the idea of breaking the last two stanzas into six lines!

[ShanZ-Turn]

This is not only adorably, but well written... I love the subject, and you have done a great job I can pictre her looking out the window... eyeing all the squirrel's

[Kara Emily Krantz]

cute. i agree - solid writing. there's a foundation to it - i can tell that your writing is grounded within yourself, which is a powerful tool for any writer. it's impressive to see, too, in this world.

:) loved it