Abuse

Abuse 

By 

Jayden DeVoir

I love you.

But I only feel pain.

Scars left black and blue.

I am your property to detain

Long ago, I was a free spirit.

Desired to be in your arms.

Now, I fear it.

Took off all your masks and charms.

I WANT TO BE! A bird in the sky

Spreading my wings and fly!

The Clouds will become my new home.

Forever ME, free to soar and roam!

I WANT TO BE! A cat on the run

Out in the sun, living life full of fun!

The streets will become my new home.

Forever ME, free on all four and roam!

Live in shame.

A shell of what I wanted to be.

I'm your cause, your blame.

Hiding away, scared to truly see.

I love you

But scars are all I have to gain

From beatings that leave me black and blue.

Punishing me with all your disdain.

I WANT TO BE! A bird in the sky

Spreading my wings and fly!

The clouds will become my new home.

Forever ME, free to soar and roam!

I WANT TO BE! A cat on the run

Put in the sun, living life full of fun!

The streets will be my new home.

Forever ME, free on all four and roam!

All I can do is wait and cry,

For the day you go too far and I die.

Author's Note

Something deeply personal to me. As an outsider looking in, I am not sure I could really touch the pure emotions. I only hope I have done this piece some justice. So please tear it up, rip it apart, let me know how you feel

With Love,

Jayden

Reviews

[Neville]

Whether you intended to create such a poetic whirlwind or not, you certainly captured the many and varied ups and the downs of this rollercoaster we are each required to ride .. I sure hope if this is in any way autobiographical, you feel a whole lot better having got it off your chest .. with respect and kindest regards, Neville

[Meaghan Rhymer]

The use of "I WANT TO BE" is poignant and helps drive each pivotal point home. I would work on strengthening the last two lines, drive it home, make it more raw.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for taking the time and offering a suggestion. I will take it into consideration. Much appreciate it.

Matthew

[Meaghan Rhymer]

My pleasure!

[Smoking Man]

A beautiful yet deeply sad poem which accounts for some poor victim.
I feel the emotional and physical pain this person must have endured.
Yes a free spirit is heaps better than a victim of abuse.
I know I've been there.
Great writing.😢

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the kind words and time

Matthew

[Smoking Man]

My pleasure,I'll always have time for genuine souls like yourself 😊

[Matthew Kult]

You make me blush

[Smoking Man]

Please don't,it's a given.

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Wow put a deep poetic for that really speaks. You some don't get the chance to span and see. They live that life crying in seconds to see. I saw this as a child and I can never forget the day. I think was 12 the day I faced my Dad after my head was slammed in a building for buying a motorcycle didn't run. I was told to take it back. He hit me that day but I broke free and hit him back and took off running. I remember I ran so hard and stayed in my uncles barn that whole night. You did great and I truly loved reading:)

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the time and personal words. It means much and is appreciated.

Thank you

Matthew

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Your very welcome

[Paul Bell]

The words. I love you, and I wont do it again come to mind. One will probably leave, or die. The other will find another to covet. Great write.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for taking the time

Matthew

[AmateurWriter01]

This was beautiful in many ways. You can really feel all the emotions in this. Thank you for putting this out there for all of us to read.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the kind words.

Matthew

[Gee]

I thought only dogs would endure constant abuse but still remain faithful, loyal to the abuser. This tells me differently.
A well written but very sad piece Matthew

[Matthew Kult]

Unfortunately some women won't leave. Its a sad reality.

Matthew

[DIVYA]

The beatings kill the love. There can be no love with violence. Then the body becomes a cage and the spirit just wants to roam free. Yes, you did it justice!

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you darlin'

Matthew

[Eggplant]

I love this poem. it shows deep emotion that not alot of people can write through. Great job. I really enjoyed this piece. I shows sadness, put in the poem, there was a glimpse of hope. I like how you ended the poem. It shows that Things may not be as you think they are. I really enjoyed this.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for taking the time.

Matthew

[Geisha]

This is deep. Anyone who's been in this position can relate to it. Wanting to be free but knowing in this situation, death may be the only wait out.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you

Matthew

[Saumya]

Ah! I just cannot explain how touched I'm with your words words here! Each word seems like the word of those women speaking their hearts out in Silent sobs, around me hiding all the annoyance and torcher caused to them, in a mere better cover of the phrase '*sobs* ...But I still love You'.

I've often seen women, in such tough conditions,dying to even inhale the fresh air flowing outside, but there conditions are worse than the birds, who can atleast breath and fly freely!
To have everything in life, except love & freedom, is the most unfortunate phase on can ever see.What good are those materialistic stuffs if the life afteall if it feels more than a cage, a cage, which is ruled by the person, who a women once mistook to be a lover, but *sigh* he turned out to be more than just a brutal, inhumane, rude master almost forever! :(

I loved the emotional flow, the eloquence, and the simplicity of this piece.As a human, it's pathetic to see women being abused, but then...Sometimes we can only see, feel, be quiet, and pray this annoyance ends soon!


Thankyou for sharing this beautiful poem. :)Nicely crafted!

*Pat on back*

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the time and beautiful review

Matthew

[Saumya]

You're most welcome :)