Desperately Wanting

Inspired by Better than Ezra's song of the same title

Like a young girl

dancing under a golden waterfall

falling into a daydream sky

Spreading her feathered

wings so she could fly.

 

Pass the moon and the stars

 to the heavens and even further above.

Surfing the the cool spring winds 

 to find my place

in your arms

 

Both of us desperately wanting

an unspoken passion

that our eyes would scream.

Wanting to be pulled so close,

and kissed...Softly.

 

Like a young girl

dancing under a golden waterfall

falling into a daydream sky

Spreading her feathered

wings so she could fly!

 

Pass Venus and Mars

   to the heavens and even further above.

floating the gentle spring wind

 to find my place

next to you.

 

Both of us desperately wanting

an unspoken Lust

that our hearts would tease.

wanting to be pulled so close,

and kissed...please.

 

  

Reviews

[Winslow Des Totes]

This is very sweet, like a lullaby to a lover. "Pass Venus and Mars
to the heavens and even further above.
floating the gentle spring wind
to find my place
next to you." Is my favorite part and makes me smile like a silly kid. I especially liked the ending! Great write!

[RachelReaper]

The second stanza is my favorite one, great, great write here. The rhymes flowed, they were vivid and sweet.

[Sami Khalil]

"Pass the moon and the stars
to the heavens and even further above.
Surfing the the cool spring winds
to find my place
in your arms"
A very nice and sweet write. I did not know you are a hopeless romantic too dear poet...:)

[Steven]

So good. Well wrought. Just one thing--golden waterfall... My brain cannot escape sexual golden shower references, lol.

[icelandicblue]

I was really drawn to contrasting spiritual and physical imagery. There is a gentle beauty in the poem, especially the images that followed the line like a young girl. The poem is beautifully romantic.

[Perception Shapes Poetr..]

desperately wanting ~ this certainly rings my destructive bells ~ reaching for an illusion and being caught in a net of despair - i enjoyed reading your creation - the character is a whirlwind