Falling

Spiraling down into darkness, into the depths of your mind. Falling into darkness, but why you cannot find. Darkness creeping closer, as the light is left behind.

Falling into darkness, like a well down which you fell. Falling into darkness, you can't escape this hell.

Author's Note

this is my first poem. thanks for reading, please rate.

Reviews

[Alex Crow]

Deep, very deep. Great inagery and voice. Good job

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Wow. I love the rhyme scheme of this, and how you describe the feeling of hopelessness and the feeling of being completely engulfed by despair. Excellent.

[SlightlyOdd]

Short and simple a good start. You have good potential.

[DeliriousCerises]

I can feel pain, frustration, and perhaps some hopelessness from this. Pretty straightforward. I also like the pattern of this poem. Good Job. I also noticed that all your sentences are broken by a comma except the first one in the second stanza. Kind of breaks the flow.