Dealing with it

It's always me who's wrong.
It's always me that gets the blame.
Good thing I'm strong,
And can hold everything in and not go insane.

Or else the fighting would begin,
But it doesn't cause I bury my feelings deep.
Ain't that an unoriginal spin.
Cause for most it will continue to steep.

But it won't for me, I'm sure.
For one I'm already insane.
And two I am mature.
I'm sure I can live with a little pain.

I have no one in which to confide.
I'm already going to h***.
So I'm just gonna hide,
And I'm also not gonna tell.

Reviews

[WickedPenWielder]

I think you have something here, very good structure. Only recommendation I would give is try to use a little more word play and metaphors to let the reader feel the pain you feel. Example: "But it doesnt because i bury me feelings deep" Or what I might say: "My feelings locked and hid away deep" . With a little more revision I think thsi has the potential to be a great piece, and is good in its self. Keep writing and let your emotions stain your paper and leave the reader breathless!

[w]

Good message. Flow is a bit off, don't ever censor yourself, don't force rhymes (they feel forced) and finish the piece - it feels unfinished. Just my .02.

[Jeanette]

I all too often, feel the heft of blame on my shoulders. I takes a lot to forgive yourself, even when you've done nothing wrong.

Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed it!
=)

[babygirlz]

Its alright it seems like a young child wrote it in some parts but its so full of emotion it seems like a grown adult is feeling it