The Harbour

Fickle fate

The water flows and eddies 

As the sun shines on the surface ,

Glassy mirroring the deep blue sky .

A lonesome morning dove fly in the morning breeze ,

As lonely as the lonesome heart in the harbour .

Awaiting his answer of love .

Looking between the shadows around ,

Asking the swiftness of the waters ,

Where is she the one he loves ?

No farewell nor kiss goodbye . She's left .

Leaving a lonesome heart with ache in his heart 

And a deep scar in his soul .

No one knows how and why ... the two lovers can't find the way .

Unlike The Harbour ... which stays true to its ever changing water .

Fate's played their hearts false ! 

Reviews

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Nicely juxtaposed image of the harbour's acceptance of and patience with the shifting tide against the lonesome heart that is forever scarred. Nice write.

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you FT Ledrew I appreciate your review

[~]

A poem "harboring" a very romantic theme, and the pain of star crossed lovers. Loved your imagery, and the allusions.

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you Moonskittles :-)

[Warren Daniel II]

I like how you chose a theme for the poem and you stuck to it so accurately, these lines "Unlike The Harbour ... which stays true to its ever
changing water .
Fate's played their hearts false" were the perfect resolution the poem needed, great job.

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you Warren Daniel II :-) ... appreciate your review

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Perfect form... cadence and rhyme are carefully creativity... and I love the content.
Nicely done indeed!! Best wishes

"fate's played their hearts false" I agree with jacob erin-cilberto

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you SquinklaPsyOps :-) ... greatly appreciate your review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"fate's played their hearts false"

what a great line...yes, love can be really fickle...and sometimes those matches seemingly made in heaven end up losing their way...

nicely expressed.

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you Jacob Erin - Cilberto . I appreciate your kind words :-)

[Christopher Casper]

"Leaving a lonesome heart with ache" "And a deep scar in his soul." This perfectly describes a situation I am going through as we speak. We all go through this in our lives. And I must agree, fate is a fickle beast indeed!

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you Christhoper Casper ... I am sorry for your current situation ... it's a hard and futile ( miracle happened tho ) fight against fate !
Wish I'd ...

[Roshan Nair]

Great words..they are simple and powerful metaphors.. I had an overwhelming sense of peace come through me as I read the last 2 lines especially. Great work. cheers :)

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you Roshan Nasir :-) I appreciate your review

[Savon Wingo]

I really enjoyed this! Very well written great job;)

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you Savon Wingo :-) ... I appreciate it

[Savon Wingo]

You're very welcome Mary Bradley;)

[Jamestown]

Wonderful write! So well written, no one knows how or why? Really made me ponder thoughts. I think
your writings are so beautiful, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Mary Bradley]

Thank you so much for your kind words Jamestown :-) I appreciate you're checking it out . GBU