Petrified

Everything was red

The blood 

The cut 

The helpless dead

Everything was red

The blood

The knife

The severed threads

Sat petrified

Looking upon what i had done

I Killed the soul

Inside of me

I killed my hope 

And all her dreams

Everything was blue

The lips 

The tears

The death overdue

It was all mine

The blood tonight

Terrified, I sat petrified

Terrified, I sat petrified

I killed the soul 

Inside of me

I killed my hope

And all her dreams

Everything was red

The blood

The cut

The helpless dead

Reviews

[Insight "MH"]

It has a nice flow, the wording is lovely. I like how you repeated "everything" in this poem to show how sad the speaker is.

[CLBombay]

The rhythm made it very easy to read this poem. In your "about" section, you say that you attempt to write lyrics for original songs and so I'm not surprised that I can also see this as a song as well.

[Peyton Light]

Amazing atmosphere. Makes you feel the guilt of the speaker.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem. Direct and hard description.
"Everything was red
The blood
The cut
The helpless dead"
The above lines left me with visions and the wanted to know more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[V]

I like the kind of fragmented and straightforward style of it. No euphemism. The images of violence being contrapositive to your soul. Good way of describing feels.

[barleygirl]

This poem is a breath of fresh air, despite it being dark in nature. Many new writers pour out their drama & angst without paying much attention to crafting the words & phrases. I love that this poem is designed to convey a certain message a certain way. Normally, I don't like much repetition, but it's well-used here. I totally relate to the main point, as I spent most of my life killing my dreams, until now. What you've expressed is kinda how it feels when you realize you've been doing this. Good job!

[gypsynight]

I like the dark emotion in it, it feels raw and real keep up the good work!