Lifeless

Your so lifeless, sad and in a mess.

  My creators agree with me, I'm sorry if I smothered you...

 Some times I wish i stayed inside...my mother...never to come out...

  I'm wasted losing time, but your so lifeless, gone never to be seen, I'm sorry if i smothered you. I wont all that is not mine, i want him but were not right, in the darkness i will meet my creators and they will all agree that i'm a suffacator...I should go know quitly for my bones have found a place to lay down and sleep.

   Your so lifeless, I'm sorry if i smothered you...                                                   

Author's Note

please ignore spelling grammer

Reviews

[Adri Moolman]

its really good

[Brian]

I really enjoyed this piece. There was only a couple spelling errors. I think you should go back and fix them, it would just make it easier to read. But great content, and message!

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

So pretty.. Keep it up.. Do u read mine 2 "ANGUISH" If possible then gives ur review..tc

[Yellow Butterfly]

This reads like a letter of forgiveness.... too late for him.... too late for her...

Sometimes in life... love is never enough...

Great read..

[hundi]

your so lifeless, im sorry i smothered you , what a good line , i like it

[B-poet]

Love the purple writing and the message your conveying within this creative and emphatic poem. Great job.

[Sarah Redigan]

That's deep and very sad

[junaid altaf]

it made me grin...............
a unique piece..........

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

sound like an angry write but mellow in its own apologetic style...
though cleverly disguised it is a firm affirmation of a confession!
Good stuff!

[Arsh]

awesome..........wow..nice job......
carry on........may be u should have to write on it something on it...............