how long is forever

how long is forever

A Poem by Adri Moolman
"

A ghost or imagination

"

There's birds singing

and the stream is gently flowing

leaves rustle in the wind

and the sun is shining bright

 

An eerie feeling creeps down my spine

leaving me cold

I can't hear any birds anymore

The clouds move in front of the sun

 

 I look around and get up

I have to leave

but something tells me to stay

not to run away

 

I hear the thunder crashing

I know it's time to leave

but I can't make myself move

and I don't know why

 

I look around me

and I see someone

He's not far away

and he looks lost

 

I walk towards him

My heart pounding in my chest

What is he doing here

How did he get here

 

I get closer to him and see his clothes

It can't be

I'm imagining thing

Why is he dressed like a soldier

 

I want to turn around and run

but he heard me

he turns around and looks straight at me

and the corner of his mouth turn upwards into a smile

 

Who are you

I ask

Why are you watching me

How long have you been watching me

 

He comes toward me

and gently carress my cheek

forever my dear

his words sound cold

 

I can't move

I don't know how to look away

Why is there blood on his chest

seeping through his clothes

 

and suddenly he's gone

but I still feel his hand on my face

I can't move

How is he holding me like this

How long is forever

© 2013 Adri Moolman


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I like it its beautiful like a mystery You should write a part two lol


Posted 10 Years Ago


you have a wonderful imagination, build on it .. keep the suspense until the very last line then bring out a surprise ...good poetry bites...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Adri Moolman

10 Years Ago

thank you
I was about to say this was really mysterious; and then I saw all the other comments and decided to shoot for originality. You are definitely very talented. This is very well written and enjoyable. Good job. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Adri Moolman

10 Years Ago

Thanks sooo much*** hahaha and thx for being original
Love your writing style...hmmm mysterious indeed

Posted 10 Years Ago


A mystery to be decoded... I quite liked the story feel of this one; you could easily turn this into a story and it would be quite effective. I love your use of imagery and the way that you take us from beauty to fear to beauty again. Perhaps it is a lost loved one, perhaps it is the personification of death...we shall never know.

Technically, a few little issues...could do with a quick edit for grammar and spacing (little things). Also, i would try to avoid using contractions as much as possible in your poetry, because it sort of takes things down a notch. Like in the first line "There's birds singing" would be more powerful as "There are birds singing". Unless you're attempting to keep a VERY strict meter, just avoid them. Overall, though, a nice piece that I enjoyed reading.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mysterious indeed, Enjoyed this!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Adri Moolman

10 Years Ago

thank u:)
This is very good, and mysterious.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Adri Moolman

10 Years Ago

thanks a lot
very nice a mysterious stranger who is he how does he know me and why is he watching very nice.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Adri Moolman

10 Years Ago

thank u

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Added on April 27, 2013
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Adri Moolman
Adri Moolman

pretoria, South Africa



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I have been offline for a long time now... I didn't feel anything worth writing and to me writing is nothing when it is not emotions put into something special. I am 17 from South Africa... My passi.. more..

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