wish

I wish somebody loved me

that you'd kiss me goodnight like you used to

or maybe just take me to school

 

I wish I were good enough

that you wouldn't yell at me like that

and tell me I'm the one who doesn't care

 

I wish you would stop blaming me

cause its starting to feel real....

 

I wish I could do something right

not lose my friends

not lose my family

 

I wish I was okay...

but i'm not

 

but what scares me most

sitting here crying

I wish I was dead....

Author's Note

sorry .... I'm not really ok right now so this is probably crap...

Reviews

[End.]

Not being ok is where good writing comes from. And it never comes out perfectly the first time. Revision doesn't detract from real/rawness. It perfects it. Your want here reached the reader perfectly as most humans want true love in some way. Well done.

[smilempsn]

hmm.. difficult times, put pain in our words too..
hmm.. hope u are fine now...

[Astro]

The expression is raw and unhinged making this an outstanding piece Adri. The sadness that overtakes us is often hard to put into words with such clarity. The world is not against you, each of us is on a path it just takes time for our legs to be strong enough to keep going when it leads us to the mountain.

[Archangel Gabriel]

Many teenagers go through such angst and this sets it out well in a poem with a sad and sorry voice to it and a tinge of deep loss.

[Keith LaFountaine]

Repetition is certainly a powerful way to get your point across. Nice work. Hope things get better soon.

[Baby Ricochet]

Everyone goes through bad times. It's part of the h man experience

[Horizons]

It's a painful poem came up from the heart when it was feeling bad don't know due to what reasons. Well converted your painful feelings into the words.