Universe

It's about feeling lost, but not minding what you've found.

As I close my eyes

This is not home

I start to realize

I'm out here alone

So I feel the dark

Feel the empty below

Suddenly a spark

Sets a lovely show

Tears like falling stars

Eyes like black holes

The ember results

Of the firework coals

And the dusty ice trails

Lead me into cosmos

Drifting darkened & red

The way everyone knows

And although this darkness

It leaves me alone

I now need no house

Universe is my home

Author's Note

ignore punctuation (or lack of it)

Reviews

[Criss ;)]

Instead of your PUNCTUATIONs...i think nice one's"...This could be a nice song don't you think...!! It's a really very nice poem, i lliked this, n moreover i liked this beautiful stanza
Tears like falling stars
Eyes like black holes
The ember results
Of the firework coals
And the dusty ice trails
Lead me into cosmos....

what a lovely phrase, here you've mentioned that, when you feeel sad n hurt bad your drops from your eyes falls' down and when tears falls' on ground from your eyes all world becomes covered with dark, because your each drop's a star and when it falls from yyour eyes, every one start becomes less on counts in sky...
"'Eyes like black holes" here you've expressed that your eyes're alike a black hole that can get anyone and your eyes're that star when it cry's it becomes supernova for that fella who tease you, who hurts you...what a nice thoughts, i love this lines indeed from my heart....
and at last you described that "embers results, here embers are your eyes, your lips, your thin hands, your every that beauty which looks stunning n if anyone does tease it , it converts into cosmos n no one can stay in from of you...your beauty...this's all about universe, you here compared yourself with universe...

i really liked + loved this poem, this write in your i think one of the great write indeed ...i'm truly sayin'...
well penned, you got it...
have a nice writin :)
take care

and have this from my heart 99.8/100 :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

You seem found, not at all lost. Brillaint read and write.