lake Michigan (track 1)

lake Michigan (track 1)

A Poem by mercy party
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its gonna be hard for you to steal my love again
when you're sinking to the bottom of lake Michigan
you should have just stuck to the streets 
but instead you stole from me
and the price for that is simple
hence the bricks tied to your feet.

you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference
go ahead and call it good clean fun
to do what should not be done

the wrath of god is being revealed from heaven
and this one bar town is going to burn like Dresden.

looks like she was turned over to a depraved mind
and i couldn't stand a chance, she's no longer mine
it would take a miracle
you should never dig a hole that you cant get out of clean
last night it was the wrong night or was it the right night and just the wrong person?
anyway you look at it we are in need of some dispersin' .

envy,strife, deceit and malice
ever since you scaled my palace walls
and i just cant wait until i finally get to see you fall 
once and for all. 



© 2017 mercy party



Author's Note

mercy party
https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/lake-michigan

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you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

Really felt like this cut through the heart of that person.

So many superficial hallmark hipsters with all style and little substance, or the little substance that is there is programmed to be lured by the typical or twisted.

Nice angry piece.

I think we've all been there, rich, poor, cool, or loser...

I also like the allusion to Dresden for some reason. It captures the utter annihilation



Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

11 Months Ago

Thank you! man you nailed it! Thanks for doing me justice with such a fired up review. the empty hal.. read more



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you should never dig a hole that you cant get out of clean

But its the beginning, hole has been dig, why would a hole has been dig, if that is not clean, I think it is clean.

Posted 9 Months Ago


I like the first stanza, heart touching, I think cleaning the dirt has been always a social reform.

Posted 9 Months Ago


you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

I like the above lines, Does it look stupidity or adaptation, I know as per Charles Darwin, Survival of the fittest, why cant we change the environment, instead we change as per environment, balancing, going back.

Posted 9 Months Ago


I love it, a scornful, type of feel, And i feel very fearful for he who stole, i empathize with this to a point, ..... you always write so elegantly and with so much emotion.

Posted 10 Months Ago


mercy party

10 Months Ago

thanks! as i do, i am glad you only empathize with it to a point, it's only entertainment. i apprec.. read more
There no words for your writing and the depth...higher level of enlightment

Posted 10 Months Ago


mercy party

10 Months Ago

you are too kind. TY i appreciate it so much!
I loved this write. I felt the scar on the heart of the lover..Loved the usage of lake Michigan.

Posted 10 Months Ago


mercy party

10 Months Ago

thank you. I'm glad you were able to feel it, that's what writing is all about. i appreciate your ti.. read more
mercy party...from your user name and reading a couple of your writes I am beginning to think you have little or no mercy for someone that leaves or betrays . Valentine

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

10 Months Ago

thank you for the review and making me smile! : )
Brutal I really like
the wrath of god is being revealed from heaven
and this one bar town is going to burn like Dresden.
Haha. But I feel the emotion of this poem in the fact of betrayal from some one you care about. And deciding you've had enough is a very powerfull thing. Good job! Keep up the good work!

Posted 11 Months Ago


mercy party

11 Months Ago

thanks for that. brutal is the word. you are dead on the mark. Thanks for checking it out.
you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

Really felt like this cut through the heart of that person.

So many superficial hallmark hipsters with all style and little substance, or the little substance that is there is programmed to be lured by the typical or twisted.

Nice angry piece.

I think we've all been there, rich, poor, cool, or loser...

I also like the allusion to Dresden for some reason. It captures the utter annihilation



Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

11 Months Ago

Thank you! man you nailed it! Thanks for doing me justice with such a fired up review. the empty hal.. read more
I love the raw quality of this piece, the anger that is controlled but only just. Really powerful.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

11 Months Ago

thank you for checking it out. I'm posting the next poem tonight, stay tuned. i appreciate the inpu.. read more

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