lake Michigan (track 1)

https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/lake-michigan

its gonna be hard for you to steal my love again

when you're sinking to the bottom of lake Michigan

you should have just stuck to the streets 

but instead you stole from me

and the price for that is simple

hence the bricks tied to your feet.

you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message

and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

go ahead and call it good clean fun

to do what should not be done

the wrath of god is being revealed from heaven

and this one bar town is going to burn like Dresden.

looks like she was turned over to a depraved mind

and i couldn't stand a chance, she's no longer mine

it would take a miracle

you should never dig a hole that you cant get out of clean

last night it was the wrong night or was it the right night and just the wrong person?

anyway you look at it we are in need of some dispersin' .

envy,strife, deceit and malice

ever since you scaled my palace walls

and i just cant wait until i finally get to see you fall 

once and for all. 

Author's Note

https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/lake-michigan

Reviews

[Alessander]

you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

Really felt like this cut through the heart of that person.

So many superficial hallmark hipsters with all style and little substance, or the little substance that is there is programmed to be lured by the typical or twisted.

Nice angry piece.

I think we've all been there, rich, poor, cool, or loser...

I also like the allusion to Dresden for some reason. It captures the utter annihilation

[mercy party]

Thank you! man you nailed it! Thanks for doing me justice with such a fired up review. the empty hallmark was trying to identify the dangers of apparent kindness. Sociopathy 101 if you will. im glad the poem reached you.. i just posted the 2nd poem of the saga.

[JessyJacob]

you should never dig a hole that you cant get out of clean

But its the beginning, hole has been dig, why would a hole has been dig, if that is not clean, I think it is clean.

[JessyJacob]

I like the first stanza, heart touching, I think cleaning the dirt has been always a social reform.

[JessyJacob]

you're an empty hallmark, sentimental, cliche, quote deep message
and i see through the bullshit and your entitlement of preference

I like the above lines, Does it look stupidity or adaptation, I know as per Charles Darwin, Survival of the fittest, why cant we change the environment, instead we change as per environment, balancing, going back.

[grayscale]

I love it, a scornful, type of feel, And i feel very fearful for he who stole, i empathize with this to a point, ..... you always write so elegantly and with so much emotion.

[mercy party]

thanks! as i do, i am glad you only empathize with it to a point, it's only entertainment. i appreciate the kind feedback.

[natalie]

There no words for your writing and the depth...higher level of enlightment

[mercy party]

you are too kind. TY i appreciate it so much!

[Michael S]

I loved this write. I felt the scar on the heart of the lover..Loved the usage of lake Michigan.

[mercy party]

thank you. I'm glad you were able to feel it, that's what writing is all about. i appreciate your time.

[Valentine]

mercy party...from your user name and reading a couple of your writes I am beginning to think you have little or no mercy for someone that leaves or betrays . Valentine

[mercy party]

thank you for the review and making me smile! : )

[Tate Viviano]

Brutal I really like
the wrath of god is being revealed from heaven
and this one bar town is going to burn like Dresden.
Haha. But I feel the emotion of this poem in the fact of betrayal from some one you care about. And deciding you've had enough is a very powerfull thing. Good job! Keep up the good work!

[mercy party]

thanks for that. brutal is the word. you are dead on the mark. Thanks for checking it out.

[Dolce Vita]

I love the raw quality of this piece, the anger that is controlled but only just. Really powerful.

[mercy party]

thank you for checking it out. I'm posting the next poem tonight, stay tuned. i appreciate the input.