love to lose

love to lose

A Poem by mercy party
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love to lose

i guess i had a love to lose
one to spare and one to choose
one to hide behind
and one to try to find

i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin 
strikes a match and begins
i guess i was no match again

i guess i had a love to lose
one to scar and one to bruise
i guess i had a love to write a three chord goodbye song to
and it aint you

once i had a love who said
those days are long over my friend
sadly wise , perhaps it is
i was wrong to imply this
if you stopped i'd take you back
and i don't think that there is anything
so make sure you know that




© 2017 mercy party



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A nice flow with some hard hitting fast paced lines. I really liked the words in this one.

i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin
strikes a match and begins
i guess i was no match again

The toughness in these lines are killer.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

9 Months Ago

hey thanks, i appreciate that and sorry i missed this! glad you liked this one!



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Hey I sure know what it's like to loose love and get it back. thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Months Ago


remarkable flow, brilliant word play. i love the energy , chaotic cynicism you vividly captured in this piece!

my favorite lines (hard to choose);
are in the third stanza/verse.

-- another amazing write!
-- xx-

Posted 4 Months Ago


That's thing with love
everything comes out on the table
some wise few
do the sorting
the real, the fake, lies , truth and our own insecurities

love bears it all

A very touching piece !!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your insight and time. Know that i appreciate that!
Again I use the word gritty. I like the pace of this like snapping fingers and again I think this has a lyrical feel. There's a staunch kinda of attitude in your lines as well. Really cool

Posted 8 Months Ago


mercy party

8 Months Ago

i'm glad you sensed the music element of this. I sure do appreciate the kind review.
I think the person who invented hindsight really got it in the neck. I suppose if the wall falls down, you can fix it. But try and go back through time to fix it. You aint doing it.

Posted 8 Months Ago


mercy party

8 Months Ago

Well said. Thanks so much for that review.
A little out of rhythm and lengthy in some lines, but still...The raw human emotion we've come to know and love from you. So...Cathartic. 😋

Posted 8 Months Ago


mercy party

8 Months Ago

Thanks for the genuine critique. I will for sure give that some thought, I sure do appreciate that. .. read more
A very gripping and intense piece which catapulted me down memory's lane to ponder my own past loves.

Posted 9 Months Ago


mercy party

9 Months Ago

Nice!
thanks for the review, it is appreciated.
I love the ''pastels'' you used for this dear author. Simply marvelous writing! you make the ''soul-break'' sound good in the best way.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

9 Months Ago

so glad it brought that effect. I thank you so much.
I love this. Keep posting great poems.

Posted 9 Months Ago


mercy party

9 Months Ago

thank you much, i sure will try!
I guess I had a love to lose
One to scar and one to bruise..
Very well said Mercy party, love is like that. We get pain, hurt and wounds that take a lot lot of time to heal. Some never heal at all.
A beautiful touching craft. Thank you for sharing..

Posted 9 Months Ago



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