love to lose

love to lose

A Poem by mercy party
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love to lose

i guess i had a love to lose
one to spare and one to choose
one to hide behind
and one to try to find
i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin 
strikes a match and begins
i guess i was no match again
i guess i had a love to lose
one to scar and one to bruise
i guess i had a love to write a three chord goodbye song to
and it aint you
once i had a love who said
those days are long over my friend
sadly wise , perhaps it is
i was wrong to imply this
if you stopped i'd take you back
and i don't think that there is anything
so make sure you know that

© 2017 mercy party


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mou
a love so simple, gentle warm feelings..sometime get complicated by misfortune. lie,misunderstanding and one sided strong feelings (probably the most painful one)..you have captured a very fine feeling with full of sentiment and emotion..and here your words ignite the heart..just awesome
mou.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

6 Years Ago

thank you so much mou, for the a really great take on this, i enjoyed the perspective. Thank you!
mou

6 Years Ago

my pleasure :)



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I guess I had a love to lose
One to scar and one to bruise..
Very well said Mercy party, love is like that. We get pain, hurt and wounds that take a lot lot of time to heal. Some never heal at all.
A beautiful touching craft. Thank you for sharing..

Posted 7 Years Ago


This one is so soothing to the heart and soul. It is in the middle of torment and confusion. Love it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I do appreciate your words about this.
I really loved the way this flowed, this was pure genius. It could def be turned into a sort of song with some minor tweaks. So nicely written MP, nicely done :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

thank you for checking it out, glad you like it!
Kesha

7 Years Ago

you're welcome
Love is anything but easy; it's messy, painful, agonizing, frustrating, upsetting, and possibly the hardest part of living in general but we can't help but desire, and it's the best/worst thing in the world.

Great job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

thank you for that.
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BBP
A nice flow with some hard hitting fast paced lines. I really liked the words in this one.

i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin
strikes a match and begins
i guess i was no match again

The toughness in these lines are killer.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

hey thanks, i appreciate that and sorry i missed this! glad you liked this one!
beautifully REAL.....one to scar and one to bruise,

Posted 7 Years Ago


alittle Melancholic Very nice flow
of words straight to the point
Raw emotions pain can be inspiring
On all levels of life.


i guess i was the one to burn
the one to suffer for the queen
who lit me up, the embers gleam
and even angels cant believe
a heart of stone, a mouth of gin
a rundown town, a harlequin



Blessings.

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

thank you for the blessings. where i am ,i'm afraid luck wont do. thank you.
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Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

7 Years Ago

Well I say that to everyone no matter how much of a battle my life is if it's pain whatever I look o.. read more
I get the feeling that the speaker dodged the bullet with this one. It isn't/wasn't 'the one' and I think that much was suspected and confirmed.
No blues songs for this loss.
They are reserved for losing 'the one'.

Always the bridesmaid never the bride M.P.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well done...a different kind of thought
I liked reading it
The title is too attractive
Everything is perfect in ur poem i think....enjoyed:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

7 Years Ago

Thanks for your words and time. i had contention with this title. I like the double meaning of it. I.. read more
Ayushi Beura

7 Years Ago

My pleasure.... :)
very nice flow throughout the whole poem, keep it up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


mercy party

7 Years Ago

will do. i sure thank you!

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