1st rule of lying (audio)

1st rule of lying (audio)

A Poem by mercy party
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https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/first-rule-of-lying

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lost my mind
on the drive
cant get back what is gone
you know i must have put my foot wrong
someone new to be sewn to the stitchings
and i just cant sit here in this house of lost things

so take what you want
you sure can empty a room 
just remember with your regrets
that i can covet too

go back home state your case
going on your way
isnt working 
doing what you want
first rule of lying dont over sell
and never go running back, back to where you fell

things got spotty
and oh so costly
you are history
and im not
as you rail and scream
before the light leaves
i want to hear you say
please dont go ok 

© 2017 mercy party



Author's Note

mercy party
https://soundcloud.com/user-318968342/first-rule-of-lying

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I'm so glad that I've stumbled upon this gem of a write (lyrical piece.)

It is refreshing to come across something that is more than strictly a poem. wonderful word weaving that brilliantly depicts deception...I adore the lyrical flow and the relatable content.

There are way too many lines too choose from that are my favorites.

Thank you for sharing, I look forward to visiting your art again

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

9 Months Ago

Thank you for those wonderful words, they help so much along the way. I am very appreciative of that.. read more



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Oh wow MP... this is very heart wrenching to read ... But I love your imagery here .... I do hope this ia just a fictional piece and not something you are enduring ...

Posted 4 Months Ago


Amazing job, I was really drawn into this :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


Regrets and yearnings that leave us wishing for a different outcome. I love the wisdom behind these lines. Very well done dear author :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


mercy party

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much Ana B. :)
That ol' school feel, and a wonderful voice, to boot... I enjoyed the rolling tune in this, and the snappy lyrics go right along... Thanks for sharing, and great stuff...!

Posted 4 Months Ago


mercy party

4 Months Ago

hey, thank so much for your kind review. I appreciate the feedback on the song.
I found that he is confused...as if he doesn't know if he should love or let them go...good write....

Posted 5 Months Ago


mercy party

4 Months Ago

Sometimes you have to take it and leave it i guess. Thanks for reading this.
Really nice to hear the audio :) I really enjoyed listening, lovely guitar work, the lyrics are most poignant and reflective of the loss and stains left over, brilliant! :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


mercy party

5 Months Ago

Thank you :) i'm so glad you checked this out and gave it a listen. i really do appreciate what you .. read more
Touching and beautifully written

Posted 5 Months Ago


mercy party

5 Months Ago

thank you for that. I appreciate it.
so you are telling him to go,and you can do the same things as him,but when you leave,don`t come back

Posted 5 Months Ago


mercy party

5 Months Ago

they can go, the request is that they don't go if they are ok. maybe, i don't know what i even mean .. read more
Cool stuff. I really liked "i just cant sit here in this house of lost things".

That struck me most from this piece.

Also, on a somewhat bitterly humorous note

"you sure can empty a room "

Made me grin a bit.

But in spite of all that, the last lines seem to still desire the person, to redeem or love.

Good stuff.

Didn't know you were on soundcloud. So am I! I should prolly put that in my Bio lol

Followed you.

Here's mine. I don't post much there yet though.

https://soundcloud.com/user-528777923



Posted 5 Months Ago


mercy party

5 Months Ago

thanks man. followed you as well.
thanks for checking this out.
mercy party

5 Months Ago

...really good work over there on soundcloud. Your poems are always stellar and they are awesome to .. read more
Passionate, full of loss and regret, but something else...
Hope.
I love It!
Thank you for sharing!

Posted 6 Months Ago


mercy party

6 Months Ago

thank you, i really appreciate that.

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