in the act

in the act

A Poem by mercy party
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#4

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tell the detective who sent me these photographs, tell him that i already know
don't let the night hold you close
no need the case is closed
i know the bad news
i knew it long ago

just like a card trick played for a blind man
i can suppose, assume or guess 
but i am so caught up to catch you in the act

ask this witness as to what they may know about the activities of the accused
and about the nice mistress
who was wearing the wedding dress
and some nice new brick shoes

we miserably play the part
taping up cardboard hearts
and everything i thought we were
i guess was not enough for her

and there is just no way out
when you are vowed to this house
as you just lye awake
lonely for her sake
and i'm just leaving you
as the young man goes to the institute 





© 2017 mercy party



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oh my, i just found this piece
and what a treasure trove your pen wrought-- this just brilliant! the portrayal of dark intrigue, suspicions/anger just bleeds through this. amazing use of words and meter.

personally i find this ink reminiscent of the movie
"gaslight" brought to real life.
always a pleasure to immerse myself into your art.

thank you for sharing -- x



Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

4 Months Ago

thank you so much. I really appreciate the "gaslight" reference as it does have that tone and feel t.. read more
ms. barrie

4 Months Ago

you're most welcome, mercy. always a pleasure for me to read your amazing writings- xx



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oh my, i just found this piece
and what a treasure trove your pen wrought-- this just brilliant! the portrayal of dark intrigue, suspicions/anger just bleeds through this. amazing use of words and meter.

personally i find this ink reminiscent of the movie
"gaslight" brought to real life.
always a pleasure to immerse myself into your art.

thank you for sharing -- x



Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

4 Months Ago

thank you so much. I really appreciate the "gaslight" reference as it does have that tone and feel t.. read more
ms. barrie

4 Months Ago

you're most welcome, mercy. always a pleasure for me to read your amazing writings- xx
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ask this witness as to what they may know about the activities of the accused
and about the nice mistress
who was wearing the wedding dress
and some nice new brick shoes


ACE!!!!!!

Posted 6 Months Ago


mercy party

6 Months Ago

thank you much.
BBP

6 Months Ago

👊🏼⚡️ tuff stuff
Lovely progressive pace, act 4 how apt certainly feels like a scene. I can't help but nod at Ana' review she's a sharp one :) , I also did not notice the subtle rhyme until I re-read I like that... a little something on the side. Great poem MP. R xo

Posted 10 Months Ago


mercy party

10 Months Ago

thank you for that. i much appreciate your take as i have enjoyed your writings. it does need to be .. read more
Hey, this is quite the scene.
The suspicion or the foreknowledge of our guy suggests a relationship on the 'cuckold spectrum' (it's a real thing - or should be).
The I don't think love ever lived here. Mistress and slave?
(that wasnt an offer)


Posted 10 Months Ago


mercy party

10 Months Ago

Ha! in all unfortunate seriousness, you at least have a symbolic point. lets just call it Stockholm.. read more
Tony Jordan

10 Months Ago

I'll take a 'symbolic point' all day M.P.
You're very welcome
:)
mercy party

10 Months Ago

i knew you'd get that! I'll set em up, you knock em down.
brilliant!! "the young man goes to the Institute". the story has only just begun. Tell me he finds success!

Posted 10 Months Ago


mercy party

10 Months Ago

stay tuned. and thank you!
Call me crazy... But I can totally see this play out as a noire scene. Really like the way you build it, I almost missed the rhymes because the story carried me, when I read it a second time I realized they were there but so smooth and subtle that they weren't meant to lead the poem, just enhance it. Like the rhythm of bass to lead guitar. Anyway...
Act Four was a good poem.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

10 Months Ago

so crazy, crazy it just might work. your input is always prized. Thanks again.
Closed

10 Months Ago

You're welcome.
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I really loved this, nice piece. Really good.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mercy party

10 Months Ago

and thank you anon.

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