supply and demand

this is just supply and demand

i see through your lies, you got the upper hand

you never wanted a friend

you wanted an audience  

and this really doesn't pain me

it's more like the feeling is blank

as if this predicted storm 

just passed through town too f*****g quick

i didn't bother to notice 

or recall a story of a broken home kid

and no one ever could see past all the evil s**t he did

it wasn't in the cards

and you've been following stars

i hope they lead you home

i'm tired of hanging by the phone

and i'm tired of taking inventory

i'd take hell over purgatory

this isn't quite chilling or compelling as you'd think

just a traveling salesman who stops off to buy a drink

he stops into this place where no one wants to hear a pitch

never ending nights and fights, stop acting like a b***h

this is the story the kind you never told

turn back to where you sold your soul

like a lost crusader yourself

riding off into the sunset with your brand new fool, alright. 

Reviews

[BBP]

Was this a quentin Tarantino movie? Lol this was rad.
I could picture a setting in a diner/hotel in a one cop town.

Maybe cause ... now I really am ;) but really though this was ace!

[mercy party]

that is good that you are, you earned it. :)
Thanks for the review.

[BBP]

Lol that's what I'm sayin ;)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Very strong and impactful.
"riding off into the sunset with your brand new fool, alright. "
The title, "supply and demand" goes in perfectly!

[mercy party]

Hey thank you so very much. I appreciate it!

[Richard simpson]

I love it very powerful and supplying to an empty world of hope and sorrow. I like it.

[mercy party]

thanks man, that got me to smile. i appreciate that

[Farmgirl]

Oh wow very powerful !


I don't even know what to say or if I should lol


Great passionate write !

[mercy party]

Thank you so much.

[Farmgirl]

As always.. Thank you.

[Kristina Moulaison]

Love your voice...pithy, snarky and strong. Great supply and demand metaphor...so many good lines here.

[mercy party]

snarky and proud. :) thanks for that. very cool.

[Ana Papaya]

Where do I start? I love the attitude in this piece.
The jilted jilts back... Or the jilter winds up jilted.
Whatever. Definitely some kick a*s lines in here, Rock Star. Your title sucks though. Doesn't do it justice. :) Sorry.

[mercy party]

Thank you AP!
you don't find the factors that regulate commodities to be thrilling from a poetic standpoint?

[Ana Papaya]

Lol. On second thought, maybe I do.
The growth rate of my interest just reached double digits...

[ms. barrie]

oh my!! this is amazing!! i enjoy the power you've penned in the opening stanzas/verses.

there are just too many lines to chose from that are my favorites!

compelling write (an in your face) though the imagery (i personally feel) is somewhat subdued.

i've throughly enjoyed immersing myself into this lyrical gem of yours.

thank you for sharing - x

[mercy party]

ms. barrie, wow, thank you so much for such an eloquent review. I really appreciate you saying that. :)

[Stacy Purvis]

Communication is one of the top 5 reasons for divorce or separation of deep friendships.
Raw human emotion displayed here.
Format: Move "You got the upper hand" to it's own line.
In all my years on this planet, I've learned at least one valuable tip: Never assume. Research and ask questions.
Wonderful read. Thank you for sharing.

[mercy party]

Thank you for the review. I'm not sure why i strung that line together like that, maybe to make it sound more exasperating. :)

[Island Hippy]

Sounds like a bluesy heartache song or maybe a bit of country. Very easy on the tongue and ear. Awesome gritty writing.

[mercy party]

thank you for that, i do appreciate it!