beat and broken

with a pitchfork in my side

you can't say i never tried

i'm beat and broken

i dragged my feet along

your roadside for too long

beat and broken

this could be a landmark day

the one i needed and i prayed

to find a way to let you know

before they deal the fatal blow

the burn of turpentine

in my veins all of the time

i've lost control

as times have gotten hard

in this haunted shipyard

i call my soul

don't want to go to the field today

'cause i'm not going out that way

the cold criminal past 

catches up with you so fast

never free

so don't you even bother with me

you might as well just call a priest

i was once a good seed

but somewhere, someone

got the best of me. 

Reviews

[Pete]

i really like this. could be a song. good write. :)

[mercy party]

Hey Pete :) thanks man, hopefully i can get it out there as a song one day. I appreciate it.

[Pete]

waddaya mean? i'm singing it now Lol ...

[Coyote Poetry]

This is amazing poetry. A feel a down and out Jazz song.
" was once a good seed
but somewhere, someone
got the best of me."
The above lines stuck with me. I tell people. In life. We must get down and dirty sometimes. No perfect life. Just us struggling and surviving. Powerful and worthwhile poetry my friend. I liked this one a lot.
Coyote

[mercy party]

Thank you Coyote Poetry, i am glad you could relate and connect with this. I appreciate your time with it. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure to read your work and you are welcome. I enjoyed this one.

[BBP]

How did I not see this one yet? Love every element of this one. I always read your poems as songs cause I'm sure that's what they'll be one day and this one would be awesome!

Reminds me of Volbeat... trust me its a compliment lol

[mercy party]

Heaven nor hell! :)

[BBP]

Oh s**t....did you listen to it?

[Tate Morgan]

I got from this a tale such as Cool Hand Luke. A man in prison on the chain gang.

[mercy party]

One can only strive for that type of toughness and honesty. Thanks for the review and awesome reference Tate. Thank you much.

[Tate Morgan]

You are welcome

[mou]

so many waves are there from which some are roaming in the mind again and again..a very concise write..like it

[mercy party]

Thank you very much for a really great comment.

[Alessander]

the burn of turpentine
in my veins all of the time
i've lost control
as times have gotten hard
in this haunted shipyard

Wow. that is an AWESOME stanza

This whole thing is oddly...disturbing while being somewhat defiant and regretful all at the same time.

Lots of emotions swirling beneath the words here.

[mercy party]

defiance and regret go hand in hand you might say, one usually leads to another. Thanks always for your very intuitive reviews.