Mirror Mirror On The Wall, Who's The Most Loved Of Them All?

Mirror Mirror On The Wall, Who's The Most Loved Of Them All?

A Chapter by .Lost Soul.
"

This story was restarted, and i went in a totally different direction, hope it's better then the last.(: Please review.

"

     “Evanlina Stow, please come to the office,” I hear the perky office lady call. People normally get scared when they hear their name over the intercom. But me, no. I have never gotten in trouble in my life. “Oh hello there there Miss. Stow! You look so delightful today!” Mrs. Rossigi exclaims. Her bright green eyes lights up as she pushes her black, shoulder-length hair out of her face. “The principle has told me to get you. We have a new student today. Mrs. Prin has asked me to ask you to be his ambassador,” Seconds after Mrs. Rossigi finishes her sentence, Mrs. Prin, our principle, shoots around the corner with a wanna-be cool guy. “Evalina! Hello darling. This is Davy. Davy Trainer,” Mrs. Prin says as if I were to be happy with whats going on. “THIS is the person I will be showing around?!” I almost scream. How was I supposed to talk to this..this.. EMBARRESMENT! He has I hear Davy laugh. How dare he. There was nothing to laugh about. “Yo, I'm Davy. You must be, 'Miss. Evalina Stow',” He's so sarcastic it makes me sick. “Yes, I am...Nice..to meet you,” I said proper, so no one could see my hatred. Well, everyone but Davy. He saw right through me. “You think since you have blond hair and blue eyes, your so cool. But honey, you don't have to fake around me. I saw right through you,” He says to me, then turns to Mrs. Prin. “I don't need Miss. Perfects help. I can find my way around the school, myself,” He says rudely, and stalks off. “I don't know what got into that boy. He seemed so nice. And Evalina. Don't let him get to you. You are great,” She flashes one of her bright white smiles and walks away. “Well, that was odd. Well, get to class, dear,” Mrs. Rossigi says and runs back to her desk to answer a phone call.

          But I don't let him just get away, I follow him. I catch him in the hall and yell to him. “Hey, You! Davy!” I yell. “Hey little Mrs. Perfect. How else did you suck up in the five minuets I wasn't there?” He put on a sly grin. “For your information, Davy, I don't suck up. They naturally like me,” I can be rude when I want to be. But I don't really like to be. It makes me thought of in a negative way. “So what your saying is, is that, teachers just like you?” He asked, almost sounding like a real question. “Yes, it's what happens when your nice. But you wouldn't know,” I don't know why I said that. “You don't even know me! Who are you to judge me by my looks. I dress this way to make a difference, change something. Then I have these rich snobs who come and rain on my parade and I am sick of it, sick of it! What do I have to do to get some respect for who I am? I don't need people telling what and what not to be. Epically by some chick I don't even know who thinks she is a princess or something! If you got to know me, you would probably like me! You just close your mind to it because I look different then your standards of 'perfect',” I don't know what to say, no one has ever said anything like that to me. Nor has anybody needed to.. “Well, your just an as-” I can only get out that bit of the word before I hear “Evalina Stow! My office, NOW!” Oh no, Mrs. Prin heard, everything..




© 2012 .Lost Soul.



My Review

Would you like to review this Chapter?
Login | Register




Reviews

i recommend seperating the dialogue so it'll be easier to read.
"Like this."
Other than that, i sayt that it was a good beginning! ^^

Posted 11 Months Ago


omg I READ this such a long time ago...but i didnt get to review and i was searching all over for this book..AHGHGH i love THIS!!!! :D there are some spelling mistakes just go over and edit it..i have the same prob with my book..but WOW great write.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Very good. I would spend a little more time describing the characters appearances. Other than that, it definitely captures the readers interests.

Posted 11 Months Ago


I love this!!!!! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


minuets -- minutes

It was a better beginning. The main character was very characterized, but maybe (like Trusting said) put a line spacing between the two paragraphs. :) Other than the misspelling and space, you have a great opening. :)

~Lizzy~

Posted 1 Year Ago


[send message][befriend] Subscribe
Jab
Evanlina sounds like a spoiled, snobby brat. I LOVE HER!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Got lost quite a bit here to where I had to stop reading. This needs some spaces... But I did read the last paragraph. Adorable! :D Evalina sounds mature...

Posted 1 Year Ago



Request Read Request
Subscribe Subscribe
Add to Library My Library

Stats

151 Views
7 Reviews
Rating
Added on April 11, 2012
Last Updated on May 15, 2012


Author

.Lost Soul.
.Lost Soul.

La La Land, ME



About
Image by Cool Text: Free Graphics Generator - Edit Image Hi Guys! I love how you guys came to my profile! I do not I believe I could sit here and write something to tell you about myself that wo.. more..

Writing