Some Bad Things Happen To Princesses

Some Bad Things Happen To Princesses

A Chapter by .Lost Soul.
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Cliff hangers(:

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What is going on? He likes me? What about all those times we fought like kindergarteners? Why has everything changed in such an unexpected way? I was to busy questioning myself to realize he still had my hand. He looked into my light gray eyes and just stared with his sparkling goldish brown eyes with a hint of green. I feel like I got lost in them, trying to find a way out, but failing. “I'm sorry.”He says. “It was wrong of me to say all those mean things about you without meeting you. I got expelled so we could go to the same school, and I could get to know you better. Because I know you have a nice side Evalina. I know you do, I just need to find it. But this isn't all on me. You have to make the effort to make a friendship work; maybe even a relationship,” He ends his sentence with kissing my hand and walking away, and I stand there, looking like an idiot.


It's the end of the day, and I meet Mrs. Prin in her office. She doesn't even look at me. She gets up slowly, flattens her skirt, and pushes in her chair. “Lets go,” She says, still not looking at me. It was a very silent car ride home. I could feel how the tension was rising every second. When suddenly, she pulls over the car. “Why did you do it, Evalina? Why?” She said, angry. “He made me mad! But I didn't even swear!” I yelled, but that is probably the worst thing I could have done. “I DON'T CARE WHAT YOU DID OR DIDN'T DO! YOU ARE GOING TO BE PUNISHED FOR IT!” She says as she reaches for the glove compartment. What is she getting? Then I see it, it glistens off the sunlight. It is a blur at first, but then I see what it is. I don't see what it is until the last second, so I have no time to hide, duck, anything. BOOM! A silver bullet comes targeting at me, breaking the air that stands between the bullet, and me.


Debris and blood splattered all over what used to be Mrs. Prin's car. As the shooting happened, an 18 wheel truck came toward us and smashed the car. I wake up, 6 days later. They thought I had died. I was shot in the stomach. I had what seems like miles and miles of gauze on my thin stomach. I was put in ICU so they could monitor me 24/7 so if I woke up, they could come. They told me Mrs. Prin had died. But, I don't remember who Mrs. Prin is. They seem surprised, like I am supposed to know her. They start naming off names like Kathy Stow, apparently shes my mom. And Kyle Stow, apparently my dad. They asked a couple other names that I didn't remember. Then they asked who I was. I didn't know. “This is serious.” One of the doctors said to the other and I was rushed to scanning room. After the scan, they say one more name, in hopes I may remember. “What about, Davy Trainer?” The young doctor asked me. But he sounded like he had no hope. But the crazy thing is, is I remember him. “Yes,” I reply, weakly, because I am having trouble talking. “What is going on??” One doctor said. “How does she remember that?” Another said.


2 hours after all that, I got signed into a room where I will stay until I retain some memory and when my wound heals. But when we start going by an emergency entrance on our way to my room, I hear an ambulance, and the doctors and nurses leave me to go help the paramedics. “Who is it?” The receptionist asks “Davy Trainer.” A paramedic reply’s.




© 2012 .Lost Soul.



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.Lost Soul.
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You've written an interesting story, Emmy, but you need to do some editing. The initial part of writing goes fast, the hard part is the editing, editing, editing.

1. "Why has everything changed in such and unexpected way?" I think you mean "an" not and.
2. "He looked into my light gray eyes and just store with his sparkling goldish brown eyes with a hint of green." Did you mean "stared"?
3. "I got shoot in the stomach." Try this: I was shot in the stomach.
4. "I was put in emergency care so they could monitor me 24/7 so if I woke up, they could come." Did you mean I was put in ICU (Intensive Care Unit), emergency care is when you first come to the hospital.

Good luck with your writing, Emmy!


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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woah thats intense...:D but i didnt get the shooting at all..i was just a little confused on who shot who..and why the did it? but other then that..IT WAS AWESOME!!!!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Very well put together. I think maybe this is all happening very fast. I am very confused on what's happening and stuff. I am sorry if I keep saying this over and over. I just need to know some answers please.

~Lizzy~

Posted 1 Year Ago


You've written an interesting story, Emmy, but you need to do some editing. The initial part of writing goes fast, the hard part is the editing, editing, editing.

1. "Why has everything changed in such and unexpected way?" I think you mean "an" not and.
2. "He looked into my light gray eyes and just store with his sparkling goldish brown eyes with a hint of green." Did you mean "stared"?
3. "I got shoot in the stomach." Try this: I was shot in the stomach.
4. "I was put in emergency care so they could monitor me 24/7 so if I woke up, they could come." Did you mean I was put in ICU (Intensive Care Unit), emergency care is when you first come to the hospital.

Good luck with your writing, Emmy!


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh. My. Gosh.
WHY WOULD YOU LEAVE OFF AT A CLIFFHANGER? I THOUGHT YOU LOVED ME! lol!!
I LOVED it! Especially because almost right after getting shot, Davy comes rollin' in with the paramedics. Coincidence? I think not. ;3

Posted 1 Year Ago


Wait!! Does that mean that Davy also got hurt in some way or another? What the crap!?!?!? WRITE MORE!!!!!!


Posted 1 Year Ago



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