surrender

accepting defeat

My finest hour was spent with you in the dark

Just before I saw the light

I foolishly thought we were there

Hoping. An answered prayer

Enlisted. Endured, despite warfare

Convinced the battle had been won

The pain of reopened wounds and the everlasting scars

It is said, "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned"

So I concede

ultimately finding my heart besieged by the ocean waves....

Even more than the sandcastles

Author's Note

comments? advice?

Reviews

[Sujash I. Purna]

it ended abruptly...it could have gone on and on...yet I liked the conciseness...

the ultimate concession to the sagacious "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned"
A vague sense of false security and hope and at the end of the day the fossil of a has-been possibility...

I believe I grasped the theme. It's great. Keep writing more!

[The Nude Writer]

I think this is great. The perfect length to get your feelings out there :)

[Melissa Frost]

I always try to capture every feeling/emotion in the least amount of words. It a personal challenge.
I am happy to know you read this one as well. Thank you

[The Nude Writer]

Very Welcome :)

[ron]

This is beautiful.

[Eagle Cruagh]

More than one General has conceded
defeat only to discover that they had
lost the battle, but had won the war.
I think you have won.
Advice ? We men are expendable,
women are the most desirable people
on the planet----- Advice: Move on.
-----John

[Eagle Cruagh]

I will need to read more of your
writing. It looks good but what
'you put in your writing is who
'you are, that I want to find out.
----- 'Eagle Cruagh

[SimiGirl]

I was once in love with a lie that felt like hope and an answer to so many answered prayers. In the end it turned out to be a living hell that took left me, and the 2 children that came out of that union, broken and scared. I feel a connection to you and this poem and that is a gift, in my opinion. Thank you.

[Distant horizons]

what a beautiful way to put such a sad ending. beautiful

[Babe Roxx]

Beautiful poem...love the metaphors used. And yes, Hell hath no fury like a Woman scorned. :)

[Almorav]

I enjoyed the poem, especially the ending that lingered endlessly. Thanks.

[Etoiles]

I have to agree it was quite an abrupt ending, I would've liked reading more.
However, that being said, I really enjoyed this piece.
:)