She Adopted

" Children orate their story from orphanage to the house of a separated mother"

 

 

We, the seeds of unknown coconut trees

Roamed and willed of a dream

Dream to be some nurturing soils' adaptees

for which we suffered, without a scream

 

Swam the waters of loneliness

Unassured about whether 'will get pinpricks?'

Where we can progres, feel bless(ed)

Destiny will decide, whether will be calyx

 

We were unlucky waiting to be calibrate

but this time, dark ocean was unfortunate

We reached a landscape despite the hate

Fortunately but regretfully, she was separate(d)

 

Once, a part of combined landscape

Expectations and incompatibility of sand,

Isolated her, felt better to escape

Better to escape the massive band

 

Companion less island, due to detaching decree

Now the home, middle of huge sea

She gave shelter and opportunity to grow

Which will change the melancholy band

Of airy blow

Which weeps for the lonely piece of land

 

At present day, air still weeps

But in different way

Wave still pat on the back shore

But now in an encouraging way

Birds still mourn

But now for the happy stay

Because she adopted and now we stand tall

Over her, by her, for her .. every day

 

Reviews

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amazing imagery with very descriptive words

[Mohit Gautam]

Thanks for your lovely comment

[Glen's not so clean sla..]

Outstounding use of imagery. Brilliant rhyme, flow, and sense of rhythm. I see a clear progression and improvement from your earlier works to you more recent ones such as this. Bravo

[Mohit Gautam]

Thanks for your check and review on my artworks.
:)

[Ashutosh Verma]

I loved the poem its clearly creates the images in my mind what is going on & your words are clear like water.

[Mohit Gautam]

Thank you for your review.

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the way you introduced the idea of an island being separated and the nurture it has given to the coconut tree. The last line sums it up. Also, you have painted a wonderful image with your descriptive words.

[Mohit Gautam]

Glad you liked it . Happy reading ;)