I'll Be There Part 2

The rest of my song/poem about someone with a life-threatening illness. Hope you like it!

 I’ll Be There Part 2

I could only watch then

As your life turned upside down

And would never ever be the same again

 

And right from the start now

We never thought things would go so wrong

But I’m always gonna be your friend

 

And we don’t care what they say

When they laugh at me and you

Don’t feel like you’re so helpless

Pray to God that you’ll pull through

 

And whenever you feel sad

I’ll be there by your side

Think of all the good times we had

We’ll make it through even the darkest nights

 

As you sleep

See the stars shining bright

Don’t ever give up the fight

Don’t be afraid

Though it’s so far away

I still feel your pain

And I wish I could take your pain away

And don’t worry ‘cos I’ll always stay

 

Hold on with me

Don’t ever think it’s all too late

I wish I could change

Change this moment in your fate

But all that matters now is that you make it through

 

As you sleep

See the stars shining bright

Don’t ever give up the fight

Don’t be afraid

Though it’s so far away

I still feel your pain

And I wish I could take your pain away

And don’t worry ‘cos I’ll always stay

 

Reviews

[Theresa]

I started tearing up when I was reading this. It's terribly sad, but the way you wrote it made it uplifting. The lines:
"As you sleep
See the stars shining bright
Don't ever give up the fight
Don't be afraid"
these words are so encouraging and beautiful. I love how you refer to the stars, its just such a great piece. Nicely done.

[Rose Tyler]

Both of them were absolutely beautiful. And now that I've read the quote explaining it, I wanted to cry because I realized why the poem/song was written. Good job on two beautiful writes.

[PaperHearts]

This was a really poweful Part 2. I thought that you did really well in emphasising and reiterating the sentiments that you expressed in Part 1. I liked the repetition of that one stanza, particularly the line about the shining stars. :) There was a definite tone of sadness in this piece, but within that, an uplifting feeling of strength and hope, which I found to be a really inspiring aspect of reading this poem. Good job,
~PaperHearts

[R E Tree]

The relationship in this is so strong I can see the connextion between you and this person your writing to. I think it is such a beautiful poem I think this will bring your relationship closer then ever. This poem shows what kind of person you are and how friendly you are in a relationship. It shows that everyone should want to be your friend as your someone who can be trusted.

[Fallen Angel]

this just became my fav song/poem i wish i could hear someone sing this! but i'll sit with my guitar making some music to it..really this made me tear up!

[Epic Destruction 911]

I love the fifth verse, this is so touching..

[Jasmine]

i love the last verse - really great as always. you have a very distinctive style. keep it up :)

[WriterSki7]

Again, it's 'cause. A good poem, no doubt. It seems very informal; albiet I will let you take that where you will.

[Charles]

Good expression of real feeling for someone else's pain. The use of common language here and there (gonna, 'cos) helps anchor the poem and make the pain more real. Good writing. s

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a beautiful poem. You have given us a story that seems to energize us with strength. I really like it alot. The loyalty and true love is amazing. It's pure and not watered down with any unnecessary details.

[Senseless whatever]

This is a really good write. Personally I like this more than number 1.