The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N

An acrostic poem inspired by Metallica's song "The Unforgiven", about a man who never took risks in life and ended up regretting it.

 The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N

 

Unwilling to risk anything, now look at what I’ve become,

Now everything for me has just come and gone

Forever allowing the world to decide my fate,

Onto the ground I fall, and now it’s all too late.

Realized I couldn’t please them all, no matter what I do,

Gave my all for this, but just couldn’t see it through.

I’m accepting my fate, nothing else can be done,

Vanquished and bitter, insane I’ve become.

End of my story now, I truly am unforgiven,

Now I die in all regret, in the sadness I kept hidden. 

Reviews

[underwriter]

really well done. i like the flow of this peice. its always hard to forgive yourself. thank you for sharing. good write.

[Fallen Angel]

This is really well written, this specific writing style is not an easy one to do and do successfully, so well done. good write

[ghost writer]

oh my god i'd give it one million, but wateva

[Jasiel Moreira]

Wonderful Poem. I truly like this style of writing but find myself not knowing what word to put Across. Well done.

[deeps]

Wow! This is really amazing here!
I see you have three parts here I will have to read them too.
I like this alot!

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

Top marks here for the most original poem of the year and what a winning format with the Capital Letters and the message contained within,bravo you have opened my mind into my own misgivings and how life has passed me by too in a way.
It's too late to turn back time but perhaps i could lose the bitter attitude that others have inflicted on me.

[Luke Masters]

Score. Well done again.

[Poeticpiers]

Not the easiest of forms to tackle and still make sense Well done

[Poeticpiers]

Nicely composed acrostic not the easiest of forms to tackle and still make sense

[ebur™]

woah, this was great first of all because of your ability to make this acrostic poem and to make it rhyme (I never have enough patience to think of the words with acrostic poem... it's sad..). Also, the whole theme with the 'not taking risks' was a good theme to use (Metallica!) and I thought the poem was really serious and demanding. great job! :)