Only an Icon

for Tim

You asked her to be your reality
when she could only be brittle,
her heart crumbled in your hands.

You believed her to be wooden
with words heavy and pointless,
so that was what she became.

Damaged and mute,
she was dreamless and frightened,
her confessions lip-synced into your deaf ears.

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

Well they say if you tell someone something often enough they'll believe it! Call her a s**t...that's how she'll end up, tell them they look like the back end of a bus...they'll have low self esteem, same with; You're a no hoper and you'll never amount to anything!
Good piece Mimi, very topical and all too common.
Cheers,
Helen.

[Partha]

I really liked the poem. the concept, which is not so easy to express conveyed nicely and artistically in the short poem. a good poem.

And also special thanks goes to Caffeine who requested me to read the poem.

[Imperfection]

From the title, I could not make out what this was about. I'm so glad I clicked on the name to find out what 'Only an Icon' meant.

I could think of so many people and so many instances in my life while I was reading this.
This is a brilliant piece. Precise and sharp with well chosen words.

[My Name is Brenda and I..]

Your line breaks and images work great. Maybe it's because I just got back from lunch, but the word "brittle" evoked the crust of a creme' brule. Very nice. I liked this very much. Brenda

[Michael X]

Wording chosen to emanate punctual feeling, Only an Icon"...the first line really opens this
up to feeling stardom, those in the limelight, and how the glare can also be too bright for
some stars, too overwhelming, continuing to read the rest i feel like she is an actress who
eventually faded like the shooting star she was, this is a sentimental way to remember, artful
rendering, your words have a touching, endearing effect, heartbreakingly beautiful, mike

[Nick Erickson]

Excellent description of an icon.
People place them so high, only to have them turn into nothing.

[the ghost of pauls]

Graceful and elegant. A particular and unique thought expressed with great precision and control of tone. A mixture of poignancy and anger, regret and responsibility. But it is in the execution of the idea that the beauty of the poem rests. Wonderful.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Brilliant language and structure here.

[......]

This is beautiful!

[Barry S. Maltese]

Nice going. There's an old thing called a self fulfilling professey. In other words, believe you will fail - and you surely will. This poem say a great deal in such a little space. The last line is my favorite. For now she is mouthing someone elses words, instead of thinking for herself. Great job!

[Bubo]

I must agree with Helen..........when someone saps you off all energy there is nothing left but a shell, very destructive.
You have written a piece that makes me feel that emptiness alot............your words of someone with no hope.
Your a very deep writer. Emotional.