Edgar

Spooky story

Every year around this time I get a dark feeling inside of me. I always feel like my kidnapper is going to come searching for me again; strange because he is in prison now many miles away.  I know it’s just a matter of time before him, and I meet once more. But this time it will not be the same; this time I will kill him with my gentle touch. When he feels my smooth skin against his body that hasn’t been touched in years I just know it will drive him insane.  A part of me is craving his touch.  I feel like I am falling deeper in love with my kidnapper every day. I’ve never had the guts to tell anyone about this weird feeling because everyone would probably think I am some lunatic, but I honestly believe that I am in love. In love with my kidnapper. Every night since we have been apart I have had whimsical dreams about him. I never wanted to be pulled apart from Edgar, but somehow my family found me when I did not want to be found. It was Halloween night when I first met the lovely Edgar. He violently snatched me up as I was walking home from a Halloween party; the way he grabbed me I just really enjoyed the pain. Ever since Edgar, and I spent years together I have not been able to love anyone else. I feel like he is the one for me, and I must be with him again. I feel lost without Edgar. 

Reviews

[Miranda]

I had to narrate a person who has been kidnapped, and that is what I did.

[Miranda]

I did what I was supposed to do.

[Reina Stone]

Learn to show not tell and you'll make this a better, more expansive and intriguing story, rather than a flat one. Right now it is unidentifiable why she would love this kidnapper. Use your imagination and play with detail and you'll find ways you can twist it a more captivating direction.