The UnOriginals

This is a poem, a tribute of sorts to all the followers out there.

They're tailgating my every move,

a serpent after prey.

I smerk and listen to hear them,

only footsteps away.

 

They shadow me like mockery,

as if I am a God.

They truly have no real idea,

a mere seed under sod.

 

Maybe, I will purposely fall,

see them follow my lead?

I could create a fake religion,

design my own true creed!

 

Such foolishness, by crowd and fleet!

By choice they're blind and weak!

They never work to pay their way,

they speak with tongue in cheek.

 

STOP! and look at yourselves you fools,

following pre-pathed roads!

Make you own way, work night and day,

respect your burdened loads!

 

I am not a fool, nor shall you be,

nothing in life is free.

even secrets come with a price.

soon shown to all, you'll see.

 

~Melody

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Taylor Ann]

I loved this poem, especially the message. It seems today there aren't any 'origianl' ideas. Because so much has already been written, and we see where certain creations have taken people, but not always our own creations and where they can take us.
Each line was brilliant! I loved the entire piece. Simply beautiful.

[J.V. Stanley]

Love this one! There are far too many cliches (even when they're used, and used often they can be quite amusing lol) but the power within this piece speaks multitudes. I love how so much can be said with one single poem, terse lines and delightful rhythm that speaks measures (hahaha pardon MY cliche there.)

I had to read it again because it was just that awesome. Makes me think of the religions and 'truths' that people proclaim ever so loudly. They develop that following and run with it and it becomes nothing more than a snowball effect from there. They lack the development of individual thought because they become so encumbered by the ideology of those they follow, they oft forget to think for themselves. Marvelously penned!

[TL Boehm]

wow. This is a wonderful write. Love the line a mere seed under sod.

[JanieB]

Very nicely written.

[eeoopig]

This is a great poem and I loved the message it had- don't be a sheep! Don't be afraid to be different, so people will know you for you, and not the people and things you copy. Thanks for the great poem!

[deepblue04]

this is so beautiful! Good job!

[~]

This poem has fulfilled me in a strange sort of way. If you can't be happy with your own company, then you have a problem. Always best to stand out than to blend in, I think. Nicely done. You have made my day a little brighter!

[Mary]

I especially like the title. Good message. I like the suggestion of purposely falling just to see what they would do. Makes me wonder who the narrator represents, though.

[Allie]

The wisdom in this is wonderfully fresh, if that makes sense. I love the picture.

[Laura Maidah]

had to look up smerk


thanks for the new word

[Trusting]

I love the picture at the top! :D