Untitled Poem

I wrote this in like 4 minutes...

I’m so tired

Hear it in my tone

Can’t wait for us

To join in a good fortune

 

You’ve reached deep

Within my veins

Love that grows

Full of pains

 

Hold me close

And feel my heart beat

It’s calling you

It’s running through

 

I have no means

But your arms

Hold me tight

I’ll be around

Don’t let go

Don’t leave my arms

 

Under the moon glow

Our love will grow

Crystal pure

Love so sure

 

Come next to me

Let’s bring it to life

Been dreaming a lot

Let’s make it real

Your tender skin

Oh so smooth

Shines the moon glow

Back in my eyes

 

Under the stars

I’ll make you dance

Whisper in your ears

Love that lasts

 

Don’t leave my arms

Loosing my sane

Can’t stand my thoughts

I’m held in chains

Lived my life

Searching for you

Give me your bliss

Say, “I do”

 

Just be there

When my hair turns gray

Take me there

Where the angels sing

--Of our love so true

So don’t leave my arms

Loosing my sane

Can’t stand my thoughts

I’m held in chains

...

Author's Note

I feel it's not complete but I'm stuck with my thoughts...

Reviews

[MOON]

Good write, lovely words.

[Heba Wahba]

I loved the part ...Give me your bliss...Say, “I do”....It's so beautiful...Keep it up :)

[TawnyBlueStar]

I think its good :D
I think you feeling its not complete makes it better :)
lovely poem :D

[samantha munning]

no its great. wording was very good. its cute and i loved it

[stars are far]

This is so adorable..
The ryhme iis also amazing..perfect work ^__^

[Kes]

I like this. :)
It might not be as complete as you'd like it to be, but it's a pretty good representation of that... feeling. Trust me - it's great. :)
Good work!