The Moon

I don’t care.

 

But that doesn’t mean I’ve forgotten,

That you didn’t like water

And your name means the moon.

And you broke my heart into a thousand

Pieces.

 

That you got a lot of headaches,

You always liked to hold my hand.

But you didn’t like yourself

And if you could change anything, it’d be

Everything.

 

And I remember

When you told me

That you loved my best friend

A hell of a lot more

Than you ever loved

Me.

Author's Note

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[TheUnrulyWriter]

I like how this poem is about being hurt, but talks about a lot of nice things. I think it shows how being hurt in a relationship isn't simply something terrible happening, but losing all the good things. Great poem!

[Molly K]

Thank you! That was what I was trying to put across when writing, I'm glad you understood my intentions. Thank you so much!

[Najam Us Saher]

You have said a lot in a few lines. I love the last lines. Well written.

[Molly K]

Thank you so much!

[Rennie St. James]

This wasn't what I expected from the title but I enjoyed it! The rhythm (in my head anyway) reminds me of Ten Things I Hate About You - the poem she reads at the end. That angsty, angry feel worked well then and works well here too!

[Molly K]

I'm glad you did! I've never watched the film, but I'll give that scene a watch now, thank you so much!

[mike]

It's quite intense and dramatic there. A moving piece.

[Molly K]

Thank you!

[Brittany Bostic]

There is pain in this poem. Remembering someone no matter how much you want to forget them is terrible. I enjoyed this poem.

[Molly K]

Thank you!

[elenaluisa]

Fantastic poem. The way you end each stanza is really effective and seems to give more meaning to the individual words and the poem itself.

[Molly K]

Thank you so much

[Dan Burrows]

A lovely piece of poetry, I wish I could say that I've never been in that situation. The pacing and rhythm are great, the poem flows really well. You made great use of imagery and even some personification. The way you end each stanza with one word is a really unique, I love it! :)

[Molly K]

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct thoughts. The ending left the reader in a sad place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Molly K]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Molly.

[Andrew M Parker]

This poem holds my own broken heart in it's hands.
I loved the line where "pieces" drops to have it's own line.
"And you broke my heart into a thousand
Pieces"
I can really feel it.

[Molly K]

Thank you so much!