Love is Like Mona Lisa’s Smile

Love is Like Mona Lisa’s Smile

A Poem by monotonix
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a Petrarchan Sonnet about my feelings.

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You’re an acrylic in my palette,

Mixing a vivid hue in my world of bleakness

You’re like Landseer’s chef-d'oeuvre that shows etiquette

The fundamental feature which results to this madness

 

My life is incomplete without you

Like a sketchpad without a valuable pencil,

An artist without his innovative skill,

And the primary colors without the melancholic blue

 

Though I’m just Piet Mondrian’s tile

The style that you’ll never see as a remarkable creation

Or like your digital arts which is an erasable file

 

You’re an acrylic without the red of passion

You toss joyful and friendly yellow paint without being hostile

But honestly, I don’t really like this awesome “friend zone” direction

 

 

© 2016 monotonix


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Boy, I bet that whole "friend zone" thing must be irritating! Isn't it? I love how you used painting as a metaphor for your feelings.

Posted 6 Days Ago


This was pretty..kind of got me loving it.
The way you cloth the persona in really great words...extolling his/her beauty and charm_then throw in the friend-zone twist at the end; really cool!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


monotonix

3 Years Ago

Thanks mate. Never been friend zone eh? lol
I dig it but you lost me with the last line. I'd like to see an allusion back to mona lisa. Something like unrequited feelings are the teeth behind her crooked smile... Never mentioned but implied

Posted 3 Years Ago


monotonix

3 Years Ago

Thanks man. You're the only one who realized what the title really meant.
Awesome! It's like a love story but the other person, which I'm guessing is a girl, friend zone him or her. :D Plus those big words, I would use simple words but this is AWESOME.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

monotonix

3 Years Ago

Thank you and The persona is a dude
I love your word choice! The poem was very intriguing, it drew me in right away.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

monotonix

3 Years Ago

Thanks I like your poems too
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J.A
Amazing. Was caught up in all the allusions of your poem. Only to feel the heart break of the juxtaposing "awesome 'friendzone'" twist at the end.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

monotonix

3 Years Ago

Thanks mate.

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Added on January 24, 2016
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monotonix
monotonix

Manila, Philippines



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