Mama

Mama

A Poem by Diane

I close my eyes and say a prayer.
Praying hard that you are still there.
My heart has been heavy since you left.

The pain is still raw after years have passed.
I feel your presence watching over me.
I smell your scent when you are protecting me.

Nothing has been the same since you left.
You were my always and everything and that's that.
I miss you so much I could almost crack.

I can't crack, I have to be strong, 
Hold my head up and pretend nothings wrong.
I still have little people who depend on me.
I wouldn't want to disappoint my mama who taught me.

I pray and pray when it is my time
that you will come collect me and the soul that is mine.
Meet me on the other side before the pearly white gates.
Hold my hand but not cause of fear. 
I just want to feel the love that you radiate. 



© 2016 Diane



Author's Note

Diane
ignore grammar problems. First draft, Will fix later

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This is such a sweet poem. It reminded me of my friend who's mother passed away when she was rather young. I look at her and I say to myself, I can only imagine how hard things must be for her. Moms are truly god's greatest gift. Thanks for sharing this.

Love
Lee

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane

1 Year Ago

That is correct. Now that my mother is gone, I can not stand when people disrespect their mother.



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That poem touched my heart

Posted 2 Months Ago


Diane

2 Months Ago

Thank you.
this is a great one Diane, every stanza spoke depth of the love and how much you missed her but all that gives the courage to forge ahead. kudos

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your review!
It can feel painful to lose someone. I understand the pain all too well. Great job on this heartfelt poem.

-William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Diane

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the review.
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Good work keep it up. I can tell you have put a lot of time into this.

-M

Posted 1 Year Ago


Diane

11 Months Ago

The odd thing is, I didn't put any work into it. Just my heart. I was missing my mom, opened the tab.. read more
This is a lovely heart-felt poem. LastMonth wrote, "this should be spoken, rather than read." As I read it indeed parts of it, I could not help but read in a low soft voice. I feel when a poem is like that it shows me how the writer has used the correct words, and they have burrowed so deep into my psyche; I can't help but want to read parts of it verbally.

Well done.

BTW: There is nothing drastically wrong with the grammar. The only thing is a comma or period could be placed after "I miss you so much." That is a very minor issue of no real concern to me. I am not one to be perfect with grammar, well at least in poems. Why? I think sometimes concentrating on perfect grammar can make a creative writing seem too mechanical.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your review. This poem is close to a prayer I use to speak to my mom so this i.. read more
To me it feels as though this should be spoken, rather then read.
But that is just me.

Emotional and impactful.
Keep it up.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Diane

1 Year Ago

thanks for the review
A fine tribute to a mother. No matter how many years will pass, their absence will always be felt. As you have said we have to be strong, for the others who depend on us and also to make our mothers proud, for this is how they would want us to be.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane

11 Months Ago

Yes. Over three years and it's still very raw. Still to this day i thrive to make my mama proud. Tha.. read more
I love this piece and I felt the emotions flow. keep writing and blessing beginners like myself

Posted 1 Year Ago


Diane

1 Year Ago

That's sweet. Thank you the review.
I love your poem.
Keep writing your poems.
I really that last part.

"I just want to feel the love that you radiate."

Is this a personal poem but if it is than I'm sorry for your lost. May she rest in peace.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Diane

1 Year Ago

Thank you dear.
Kasey Christopher

1 Year Ago

You're welcome!
This is such a sweet poem. It reminded me of my friend who's mother passed away when she was rather young. I look at her and I say to myself, I can only imagine how hard things must be for her. Moms are truly god's greatest gift. Thanks for sharing this.

Love
Lee

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane

1 Year Ago

That is correct. Now that my mother is gone, I can not stand when people disrespect their mother.

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