Happy Halloween

 It sounded like scraping on my closet door. Anyone else would have thought it was one of their pets. We don't have a pet. My heart was beating so fast I could hear the blood pulsing through my ears.

Just as I reached the closet, a little voice inside me told me to run. I that's exactly that. I ran out of my bedroom, down the hall, and through the living room to the door. I didn't slow down as I rip the door open to escape. Escape is one thing that didn't happen. Iran full force into a hard body. As I backed up slowly I felt a searing pain and the top of my abdomen. When I look down there was a serrated knife sticking out of me. Who it came from I cannot remember. The only thing I remember is collapsing.

Author's Note

Ignore editing issues.

Reviews

[Debbie Barry]

I know you were writing to a prompt for this, and it's interesting to see how you handled it. I like the ending, but it would be interesting to include something to connect the man at the door with the scratching, if you decide to expand it at some point.

[Cyd]

Why so short? Were you aiming for a specific word count or something? Is this part of a longer story?

I think this could be a little longer, right now everything happens at once and there’s not time to experience it. If you dragged out the beginning a little, make us the reader go, “Oh no, don’t investigate the sound, get out” and then when she does is when she gets into trouble, I would feel engaged in the story... and almost guilty for telling her to get out (I just assume it's a girl, isn't that funny)

[Diane]

The writing prompts. Just things they use to practice writing in different ways. I'll probably put the story together better but where I did the story you can only use so much space.

[Cyd]

Ah I see, I've been there too :p Prompts can be good and fun to play around with

[Diane]

There's a good chance I could always make it longer. There's so much more I could add it to this.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

1. I that's exactly that. (Did you mean: That's exactly what I did.)
2. I didn't slow down as I rip the door open to escape. (Did you mean: I didn't slow down as I ripped the door open to escape.)
3. Iran full force into a hard body. (I ran)
4. As I backed up slowly I felt a searing pain and the top of my abdomen. (at the top of my abdomen.)
5. When I look down there was a serrated knife sticking out of me. (When I looked down)

Thank you, Diane!

[Diane]

yes to number 1
yes for number 2
yeppers (typo) number 3
yes to number 4 tooread moreyes to number 1
yes for number 2
yeppers (typo) number 3
yes to number 4 too
haha yes to five too.
Looks like this is what happens when you use voice text on your phone.
Thank you and your side kick OCD for finding all my mistakes.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Smiley Face

[Diane]

all of my comments didn't show up.
that is sad. Thank you and your side kick OCD for the help. Ill fix them tomorrow. I have had enough of
typing. I hit something when I was typing and all 13 chapters vanished! Jim got them back though, thank goodness!

[Wendy Seames Garner]

I lost a bunch more of my writing tonight. Again I tried to save it, not publish, so I could keep working on it. But where does it save to?

[Diane]

Write one google docs. It backs everything up. I mean everything.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

It didn't work for me, only found some old stuffed from the internet that I had saved.

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Oh, you won't let me edit, Diane, you know my OCD? It's a good start, though.

[Diane]

Edit away mama bear. :-)