Succubus

Succubus

Demoness

Temptress of the night

Are you as evil as they say

Or are they more wrong than right

Whatever you say

I can see through your lies

Feeding off sleeping men’s souls

In the dead of night

You enter their dreams

Excite them with lust

Enjoy your meal

Then turn them to dust

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Some myth and tale. Beauty, wonder and terror. Succubus, one of the great tales in myth and tale.
"You enter their dreams
Excite them with lust
Enjoy your meal
Then turn them to dust"
The above lines. Maybe true, maybe a wish. Thank you Diane for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Diane]

Thank you for reading it and leaving a review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Diane.

[Chris]

So many stories abound and yet the ends don't always agree - hence the attraction. "In the dead of night" was a fair pun ...intended?

[Diane]

Thank for the review. Always nice to read your reviews.

[Hannah]

I've always found folklore stories and creatures really interesting. I like your descriptions of the succubus, and the formatting and wording of the poem are good. I like the implication that the myths about the succubus might be wrong; it adds another level to the writing.

[Diane]

Thanks you for the review. I was trying my hand at something new and I found myself liking it.

[R.E. Ray]

The sharpest, cutting truth in a few poetic lines! Incredible imagery and word choice here. It all works well, especially the sharp, direct tone in your words. And, good advice for all who might read this piece. Nice work, Diane!

[Diane]

Thank you for the really great review. :-)

[Novelwriter97]

This is really amazing. I'm not really a big poem person but this really caught my attention. Great job! 🙌👏👏

[Diane]

Thank you for the review.

[Justin]

amazing job!!! i was able to use my imagination, and the presentation was awesome too :)

[Diane]

Thank you!

[Justin]

your welcome, i liked it

[KCthelastboyscout]

This is amazing.i think this is one of your best poems.youre making great use of your imagination

[Diane]

Thank you very much!

[mattavelli]

Hello, Diane! :)
I think it's a fun read. Who doesn't hate a succubus... Haha
Your poem begins with really great rhythm.
I think the line -
"feeding off sleep men's soul" would read better as " feeding off sleeping men's souls"

[Diane]

Thank you for catching that for me. You are welcome too go through all of them. Haha. I am sure you will find something in all.

And thank you.