Glittery Sunset

the sun setting

As the world grows quiet
The sun bows out gracefully
As it sets
The sun shows a different side
Like the fall

The sun changes color
It goes from a brilliant yellow
To a dim and warm orange glow
It dips ever so slowly
It grants us  time

To witness its softer side
before it goes to the other side of the world
It envelopes the landscape
Showering the world with tranquility

Reviews

[DaturaBlossoms]

Very good concept and execution overall. I agree the first stanza could be better.

[Aldora Sparrow]

Nice work. I have a problem with the first stanza in general. Too simple and doesn't demonstrate the talent that I know you have. Too dull. Especially, the third line. "As it sets" As it sets? Sets? I need more. Adjectives, anything. Otherwise, nice job on doing the requirements.

[Bette]

i love this truly beautiful in its simplicity. well done meeting the challenge.

[Constance-Outspoken]

A nice short piece, long on sentiment.:)

[Haifa]

So nice and I really love sunset

[jhed]

wow..short but beautiful. i love the sunset..especially when you're with the one you love and your family of course.. Thanks.. keep it up!

:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing as beautiful as a beautiful sunset. A six pack of beer and a lot of time with the sunset. A good night. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

Nice for a short poem. Thanks for posting in the group.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice short one. Beautiful nontheless!