ambition

my life is sweet

to simply outlive the competition

store  winter in quilts of under acheivement

not to care what my ego thinks

his ego thinks

to fathom being as

all of it

and sing thoughts

that make the room grow brighter

to love everyone in the world

at once,

words and meaning

traveling

in foreign souls

Reviews

[Donald Meikle]

Traveling on and taking it with me. (thanks) Oh and comfortably weavin' my own.

[Sel Whiteley]

You can really feel your musicality in this poem. The imagery is brilliant: 'store winter in quilts of under acheivement'. The nuance, the determination and the pure humanism of the dream underlaying this just brilliant.

[J.P. Bristow]

you my dear have a lyrical soul--thank you for sharing as it always touches and brings joy.

[Gandré]

store winter in quilts of under acheivement ------ this I love. what a perfect deep metaphor! The first part of poem tells me - this is all about letting go... and simplify your life.. isn't it? I love simplicity.
to fathom being as

all of it

and sing thoughts ------here I love how it sings, indeed. hm. perfect rhythm. and how it wonderfuly weaves into :
that make the room grow brighter

to love everyone in the world

at once, ---------this generous sending consciousness, ending with "at once" what again so great harmonizes with :

at once,

words and meaning

traveling

in foreign souls ------------this at once- could be used twice, but yes that's what readers can see right away.. plus a wonderful wealth through sharing love and vivid sight.. Loved this one totally. favorite. so deep with few lines. really, that's poetry!!

[Gandré]

store winter in quilts of under acheivement ------ this I love. what a perfect deep metaphor! The first part of poem tells me - this is all about letting go... and simplify your life.. isn't it? I love simplicity.
to fathom being as

all of it

and sing thoughts ------here I love how it sings, indeed. hm. perfect rhythm. and how it wonderfuly weaves into :
that make the room grow brighter

to love everyone in the world

at once, ---------this generous sending consciousness, ending with "at once" what again so great harmonizes with :

at once,

words and meaning

traveling

in foreign souls ------------this at once- could be used twice, but yes that's what readers can see right away.. plus a wonderful wealth through sharing love and vivid sight.. Loved this one totally. favorite. so deep with few lines. really, that's poetry!!