My Gold Parakeet

She was a bird in my cage, who wanted to escape...

You were my golden parakeet

My crystal ball of feathers

With metal bars that strung across

Your velvet wings

To protect you

In your curled cage you were perched

For me when I needed affection,

When I needed a little love

And your silent advice when I needed direction

But I never saw you trying

To break free from your metal cage,

Until you found your path

And without a trace you flew away

And I realized the bars to your cage

Had rusted a chilli pepper red,

And your wings had itched for just so long

Your left behind feathers, were torn to a shred

I forgot you were in a twisted cage,

One that winded around your beauty

You were my little, gold singing bird

My one true companion, who never loved me

But sometimes when I wake up before dawn

I can hear a sweet song from a nearby tree

It’s a sound of a soft hearted forgiveness

That comes from a bird who’s finally felt free

Author's Note

Let me know what you think

Reviews

[WillaDanvers]

Very creative and different. I love this with it's soft and gentle ending :)

[Emily]

Lovely poem!
Very creative topic!
Keep it up!!

[Clara Kevie]

Awww!! The ending is adorable and really strong!
The chilli pepper red seemed out of place at first, but it goes well with the wings itching in the next line.
Very nice ^_^

[Lorry]

I like how you describe both your feelings as well as the caged bird's feelings too. We grasp at beauty like it can be possessed, yet it is only when it is lost that we can see it for what it truly was, our pleasure to behold, and be part of until we weren't any more.
Brilliantly captured my friend.

[barleygirl]

Very creative & original-sounding description of this common situation in relationships. Most who like having someone caged nearby for convenience never get to this point of realization. There's an interesting contrast between your gentle delivery of this story (showing your true empathy) & the actual description of what transpired. I like "curled cage" becuz it's a weird-sounding description & also apt.

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you for the review, I'm glad you saw the story behind the parakeet and the cage, and how it can translate into a type of unhealthy relationship. Thanks again!

[Poetic Angel]

This mirrors a few poems Ive written, actually.. I enjoyed reading this. Its very good..

[Addict With a Pen]

I'll have to check them out.. Thank you for the review.

[wordman]

so maybe the bird did love you,it just wanted to be free,now out side your window singing from your tree..

[Ashley]

I like it. To me, it portrays someone who has a child or partner who they are jealous over and are too protective of, they also don't realise this until the end of the poem

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you for your review, and feedback of what you see when you read this. It really helps :)

[Ashley]

No problem