A Friend Who .........

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

My friend

 

As thoughts struggle in my mind
To escape its trying
With him only i share and never hide
Stress evaporates and is slowly dying

 

As desperation squeezes my heart
To blackland trying to pull
He opens to mea path of light
My heart with peace is full

 

I sit there feeling low and weak
Mind is gloomy, heart bleeds
Only your help i seek
As its the only thing i need

 

With you my heart found serenity
With you i feel complete
Having you is my peace for eternity
Having you grief i'll never meet

 

 

But.....
You never existed ........

Reviews

[Nath]

Plainly amazing. At first it appears to be a very hopeful, positive poem, but with the turning point in the last two lines, the whole situation becomes very depressing when rereading the first part.
At times we need to open up to people we trust, even if they seem to be not as "trustworthy" as our ideal of the one faithful friend we are hoping for should be. We cannot find someone we trust fully with out taking a risk and start trusting someone we have faith in, even if we don't trust them with everything yet, but maybe we come to do so with time. Talking about it sure can help get through rough times.
Wonderful poem, good flow.

[Amata Luna]

What a feeling of having someone who doesn't even exist. I like that about this poem. It brings to mind a good person who is worth to be missed. I can only say that you did a real fine job.

[Michael Thrower]

So peaceful. Reading this I could share the emotions you put into the writing. Really good job, and well chosen words. It brings a coldness, but then such a warmth. Love it :)

[Raven Starhawk]

This is a place I often come to. I am a visitor to melancholy but then again I am more like a resident sure to inhabit it forever.