In a dark forest,there was a dark house.In the dark house there was a dark staircase......
In a dark forest,there was a dark house.In the dark house there was a dark staircase.An up the dark staircase there was a dark room.An in the dark room there was a dark closet.An in the dark closet there was a dark trunk.An in the dark trunk there was a dark box.An in the dark box there was a dark bag and in the dark bag there was a dark paper.An on the dark paper there was a dark message,and that dark message read......In a dark forest,there was a dark house.In the dark house there was a dark staircase.An up the dark staircase there was a dark room.An in the dark room there was a dark closet.An in the dark closet there was a dark trunk.An in the dark trunk there was a dark box.An in the dark box there was a dark bag and in the dark bag there was a dark paper.An on the dark paper there was a dark message,and that dark message read.....In a dark forest,there was a dark house.In the dark house there was a dark staircase.An up the dark staircase there was a dark room.An in the dark room there was a dark closet.An in the dark closet there was a dark trunk.An in the dark trunk there was a dark box.An in the dark box there was a dark bag and in the dark bag there was a dark paper.An on the dark paper there was a dark message,and that dark message read.....
Between your sentences and the start of a new one, there are no spaces. Makes it very difficult to read. And all through the poem you write An instead of And. Where you start your dark message, there should be a paragraph break. And, to appeal more to the eye, perhaps italicize the message so it stands out from the rest of the poem. Also, where you have commas in some spots, there are not spaces between your commas and the next word. Grammatically, this is a very disturbing piece. Otherwise, it is very interesting. The difficulty of reading, though, takes away from the creativeness of the poem.
Between your sentences and the start of a new one, there are no spaces. Makes it very difficult to read. And all through the poem you write An instead of And. Where you start your dark message, there should be a paragraph break. And, to appeal more to the eye, perhaps italicize the message so it stands out from the rest of the poem. Also, where you have commas in some spots, there are not spaces between your commas and the next word. Grammatically, this is a very disturbing piece. Otherwise, it is very interesting. The difficulty of reading, though, takes away from the creativeness of the poem.
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