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A Poem by Neal S
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Just a small reminder to have fun with what you're doing.

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In the end we write to please
Whether or not it comes with ease
Does it make your heart sing
How bout your eyes gleam 

That's what its all about

So I set 
And click away 
Then try to think of something
Cool to say

Did it mean this 
Or possibly that
Was the wording lean
No the structure was too fat

Just remember 

If you jot down things about 
The breeze 
Or trees 
Some manly sleaze
Bees 
Your sister bow legged knees

In the end
We just write to please

© 2016 Neal S


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That is all we can do Neal. No matter what the intention, we only publish work on sites such as these to get more of a feel for the reaction of our words, and we learn from them, as well as reading others works. We may not all be seeking out the fame monster, but words need to be shared to be understood, and understanding brings learning and adapting to the forefront of our minds. We're all just a massive classroom of eager pupils, hoping for the occasional A+ :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lorry

7 Years Ago

Ha, honesty always wins Neal. I find just saying what you felt, no matter if it is the intended subj.. read more
Neal S

7 Years Ago

I need to just start a Neal scale of rating...Cool..Super cool..Badass and Most Badass!! lol
Neal S

7 Years Ago

Come over to my page and check the chart to see where they landed...



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Neal S,
"Reviews" was a delightful reminder of the joy which comes in seeing our shared lives in one another's writing. I often find the commonality of ideas and similar experiences within the words of others; (going both ways.) It is so comforting to know that we are all quite alike....................Bless you. Kathy

Posted 7 Years Ago


You are right. We all write to please ourselves first and in the due course if it pleases many we then of course we get more pleased. I loved the lines " Did it...... too fat."
Yes, Our thought process goes like that.
An interesting thought, nicely executed..
Keep sharing...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Thank you Bala!
CONTENT AND FORMAT

It has been my experience that writers tend to either overthink or underthink while reviewing. Everyone has a different writing style which will reflect during their interpretation. Some are like me where we tend to deconstruct subject matter for their content. Others tend to focus on simple mechanics of writing such as grammar and punctuation. Then there are those who barely speak in sentences that give false praise. The only reviewers I frown upon are trolls or rather insulting.

CONCLUSION

Overall, reviewers and writers vary in their thought process. I like this diversity for it helps me improve my writing. Thank you always for sharing!

sincerely,
ria


Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Thanks ria
"Desperation is a stinky cologne" super troopers

Reminds me of farting in an elevator with only one other person in it.

You wrote this to get reviews.... you'd pander your own insecurity like that? Good for you. I guess.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

I figured you show up after a wile. It seems as if this review is no different than the others iv'e .. read more
Such very true words put in a great poetic way. We have all had these thoughts of doubt and jotting things down. Some poems i jave read on here i find go very very deep. But this is different, its true and straight to the point. Keeping it simple but something we all can relate too......brilliantly written.

Mark.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for stopping in. Very kind words.
matrixmark

7 Years Ago

Bot a problem. Was a pleasure to read.
Yes, you said it well, in the end we just write to please. Beautifully written Neal. People think to the writers words come by magically although there's a bit of truth in it but the fact remains sometimes it just not comes with ease.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Thank you Anjali :)
love the wording in the 4th stanza....in second line i read "whether"---

but yes, we write to please...often the question is....writing to please ourselves or others?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Oh, I see..Thanks for the correction Jacob. And thank you for taking the time to read it. I imagine .. read more
That wee tricky thing...I worry my words may offend. There's truth in your words. Nice one. R xo

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Thanks! :)
I find carrying a notepad and pencil to jot down thoughts or others spoken words help my writing. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Cool! .....
Yeah, reviews are tough for me too. I sometimes worry that I will say the wrong thing but I guess what you say is true, we just want to share and hope people understand us.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neal S

7 Years Ago

Yes ma'am for sure! Thanks for dropping in :)

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