Take Her Home

Take Her Home

A Poem by Neal S

She stood on the vibrating event horizon 
Strange data tessellating 
Soft blue eyes cutting through the city night
Its a strange way home
Over this colorless tapestry
There are moments in time 
When you can only take the next step
Then another
She wanted that familiar feeling 
That neon cafe back in her knowing geography 
This city was no longer hers
A conspiracy theory 
Made to disrupt her mojo 
Something she’d found and lost so many times
As the rain started
A slow fluorescent drumming behind her eyes
She made her way homeward

© 2016 Neal S



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This makes me think of an awakening, like the kind that happens when you've learned something that changes the way you look at the world. There's no coming back from a realization like that. Everything looks different

Posted 9 Months Ago


Beautiful piece! I love that the imagery and language used are consistent throughout...and the line 'colorless tapestry' is excellent.

Also love the minimalist approach to punctuation. Definitely thoughts which ring true and speak to me as a reader.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
Wow I amazed at how well I could connect with this brilliant piece of writing. Great efforts and really good job!
Happy Holidays :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you could connect and enjoyed it! :)
My first thoughts on this piece Neal, were that I have too known someone who found themselves on the event horizon, only able to take a next step, mojo lost...but then I realised that it may just be as true for me too. Maybe there are truths here for all of us to see. I only hope she fulfils her journey. Powerful words that resonate, my friend.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Thank you Sir.
Life is change. Hard to return to same place.
"That neon cafe back in her knowing geography
This city was no longer hers"
The above lines are true thoughts. I left my home often and place changed or I did. Thank you Neal for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much Coyote. Happy holidays :)
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

You are welcome and have a safe and fun New Year.
This is a good piece. I like it. She wants to go home. Will you take her there?

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

I don't think she'd need me to lol...She's pretty tough on her own. Thanks so much for stopping in! .. read more
Barbara Borel

11 Months Ago

She is a warrior
Neal S

11 Months Ago

Indeed!! Thanks again :)
"There are moments in time
When you can only take the next step
Then another"
Interesting... Although this moment never came in mine, having always taken all the major steps at once 😂
I liked reading this! Great flow ☺

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

lol..Indeed! At times we just have to say screw it and go in both feet at once. Lovely review and th.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Haha yes exactly! You are welcome! It was a pleasure ☺
In my writings I favour the old straight forward wording, the common way if you like. But I must say that after reading this a few times I am somewhat smitten with how you tell your story. This is a lesson on how to write poetry which makes the reader think.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Well thank you Robert. And i'm glad you enjoyed it.
I loved,
"She wanted that familiar feeling
That neon cafe back in her knowing geography
This city was no longer hers"
I could grasp exactly what the character's mood and tone was in that statement. I'm certainly going to look through your other works! Keep it up!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Thank you Kaylee and please do. I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
a sense of ..Alien-ism in this one.. you use intensely powerful words. a well expressed piece my friend. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neal S

11 Months Ago

Thank you Sir for taking the time to read it.

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Hello everyone. My name is Neal Sanford and i'm a chef from Tupelo Mississippi. I've been writing for what seems like my entire life but just of late been keeping a record of them. My main focus is po.. more..

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