Karma. (Sing in Silence)

Life & it's funny ways..

Your Smile is a Shotgun,

But my Silence is a Siren.

Emotional Cacophony,

I'm Singing in Silence.

My fear, your delight,

Lest you Forget,

Time is but a Glimpse,

The Seed will grow.

After all that has been unsaid,

& all that has been done,

Her prewritten verses,

She has sung to us in Silence.

Your fear, my delight,

Lest you Forget,

Time is but a Glimpse,

The Seed has grown.

My Smile is a Shotgun,

But your Silence is a Siren.

Emotional Cacophony,

You're Singing in Silence.

Author's Note

enjoy.

Reviews

[Ruth]

The balance here is fierce...you always voice from the depths of a passionate emotion...it weaves through your words with a heat...tangible and gripping...I'm not sure which is more poignant, that smile or the silence...both have their potent place in such cacophony...excellent Neo...blessings...

[Desert Rose]

you must be one of the best who review my poems!
Poppy Ruth, i salute you!! :)
Thank you for the constant motivation & the deep reviews!
i should take a bit of time to reciprocate!!
Thank You!!

[Ruth]

Namaste dear Neo, you are most welcome, my pleasure :)

[KWP]

nice portrayal of a relationship and its cycles ... if only we all learned to communicate better :)

[Desert Rose]

there...right there...THANK YOU!!!

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Keep it up!!

[Desert Rose]

Thanks Emily!!

[BL]

Like the contrasts used and the simplicity of this one. This gives me an impression of two people, of two individuals and of no one else, I don't know who they are, but it has worked. It's nice to review something a bit different.

[Desert Rose]

they're very unique, rare & they fear for each other very much :)
thanks for your review! i appreciate it!

[AliciaB]

SUPER COOL!!!! I love the way this poem is constructed on so many levels. For one thing, the mirror effect is very interesting - the first two stanzas are "reflected" in the last two, with the roles of the speaker and the subject being reversed. This expresses very well the idea of "karma," as you suggest. Repeated use of the "s" sound is also good. I like the repetition of "singing/sung in Silence" in the first, third, and fifth stanzas. The paradoxes of silence v.s. shotgun, siren, singing, cacophony, etc. are also intriguing. My favorite lines: "Your Smile is a Shotgun, / But my Silence is a Siren" (and, of course, the mirror image of that in the final stanza). Also "After all that has been unsaid" - very cool idea there! I admire you for your detailed thought and skilled execution of this poem. Excellent work!

[Desert Rose]

that is one review that i will fondly remember!
you nailed almost all of my intentions behind it ;)
thank you very much Alicia! makes me want to keep doing this!

[AliciaB]

Yay! Keep at it! :)

[Autonomous]

I read this few times already and to be honest I can't get it out of my head. All I can say is that I love it. Great work!

[Desert Rose]

wow, i'm glad you enjoyed it!!
Thank you for shelving this, i'm humbled! :)

[wordman]

sometimes words need not be said,the emotion will flow without words

[Desert Rose]

true that...
Thanks again Wordman!

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Kirsty Woodward]

Yes Yes Yes! No words; yet I must write 25 characters.

Love this.

[Desert Rose]

hahaha, this may be your best review ever ;)
thanks Kirsty! keep on!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts upon one of my favorite subjects.
"My Smile is a Shotgun,
But your Silence is a Siren.
Emotional Cacophony,
You're Singing in Silence."
I agree and I liked the statement above. Silence can be golden. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Desert Rose]

Thanks Coyote!! (^^) Golden & Painful..

[Coyote Poetry]

Can be. You are right and you are welcome.