Life, A Beautiful Lie!

realities of life!

There's more than that meets the eye,

Life is a just a beautiful lie.

 

Giving everyone a very sweet smile,

But Tears flow once in a while.

 

Laughing out loud in high tone,

But Dying inside of being alone.

 

Mind unafraid of any threat,

But heart full of unforgettable regret.

 

Partying friends with excitement shouts,

But millions moments filled with self-doubts.

 

Roaming carefree around the town,

But those dark secrets buried deep down.

 

There is so much behind the eyes,

No one sees the hidden lies.

 

Because,

There's more than that meets the eye,

And Life is a just a beautiful lie.

Author's Note

Waiting for your feedbacks!

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Aww, you captured my emotions in appropriate words. Indeed, it seems like everybody wears a mask. I wonder what would happen if we all just get real about how we feel. Life is better without pretenses. :)

[nibhz]

yah life will be better without pretenses, i wish everyone understood that!

[Michael Heasley Jr]

So very true, I feel this way too often. The flow and use of words are spot on. I really enjoyed it! I will be reading more of your work :)

[nibhz]

thank you so much! Read more! :)

[naina verma]

super awesome blossom... touched deep within.. juss a single word as I m spell bound - perfect:)

[nibhz]

thank you so much! :)

[naina verma]

wowwww.. u really have an xcellent feel.. deeply touched.. actuallly spell bound.
a single word. perfect: )

[nibhz]

thank you so much! :)

[Izzy-01]

i like how you adressed all the aspects of life that people usuallly dont want face in life and you wrote it in such a subtle way but the words used were powerful . nice combination makes a meaningful poem.

[nibhz]

thank you so much for your appreciating and encouraging words! Read more!!

[Vidushi Sharma]

"There is so much behind the eyes,
No one sees the hidden lies."
it relates..!! Fab word di!! loved it!! :D

[nibhz]

thank you so much! :)

[Tiffany Boles]

Wow I love the deepness in this. The message is so easy to relate to as well. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you.

[nibhz]

thank you so much :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I love the use of irony and sarcasm here.
When life cannot give you what it is as always said, then it's just a "beautiful lie."

The last verse is so much effective. Excellent!

[nibhz]

thank you so much for the appreciation!

[Kyra Evalice]

The flow of this poem is smooth and catching, while the words themselves are very true to life. One could almost feel the moments and even have flashbacks to moments described in your poem. Very well done.

[nibhz]

thank you so much for your appreciating words! :)

[Tks]

Good usage of rhyming patterns together with couplets
Reiteration of initial couplet in the ending made for a nice ending
Other than a minor grammar mistake or two, everything appears insightful
Perhaps a more substantiated work next time?

[nibhz]

thank you so much for the review! will surely try to keep up to the mark next time!