Undecided Love

Listening to Nickelback and thought of this. Tell me what you think??

Why are you messing with my emotions 

Why do you want to mess with my heart like you do 

If you want me just tell me 

Don't wait because I  might be here when you get back

I feel a little empty handed 

I have told you how I felt 

I have screamed it to the mountains 

Now its your turn to prove what kind of man you are

Otherwise you can kiss me goodbye

You're almost as fake a barbie

You're making me regret even knowing you 

So what are you going to do?

I am not going to fall to my knees

I am not going to beg you

If you can't back up your feelings then,

You shouldn't have told me.

You told me you thought I was cute

We talked, got to know each other

Then you left me high and dry.

What am I supposed to do with that?

It was like knives being thrown at my heart

The pain is slow but when it hits you 

You're dead that's it.

Nothing left but the blood to run.

I hope you know what your doing

Because I might not be here when you get back.

The voice in my head is holding back my tears 

Lets hope you are the man that catches them.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Oh sweety, never feel like that because of a guy ! We're not worth it xD
And by the way, if it's a real story, DUMP HIM, don't let him choose, he's already made you feel bad for too much !

[Bryan Micheni]

strong emotion in this piece... more than the nickelback for inspiration. i like

[dan nacario]

great use of words..reader could easily connect with the message..

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

strong words and emotions

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the direct and honest emotion in the poem. Most of us want the truth. We don't desire to waste time and energy on a useless person.
"It was like knives being thrown at my heart
The pain is slow but when it hits you
Your dead that's it.
Nothing left but the blood to run."
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Autumn]

It's a very strong poem, very true, many people could relate to it! Although i would keep in mind "show don't tell" for this piece, it would show more your emotions, your feelings..
Nevertheless very good piece!

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I love it. So raw, so honest. Excellent poem.

[Gomer LePoet]

Well I don't think there is any question as to the message being sent here. I hate to say this but there are some grammatical issues that I'm not sure that you meant the words/thoughts to come out like they did. last line of the 1st stanza and the 3rd line of the 5th stanza. Let's all hope he is the man that gets the message.

[TeaNoon]

The idea here is great. I think that the visualization is plenty there, even perhaps a little too much. Having so much detail leaves little to nothing for readers to interpret on their own. Really wonderful idea.