Be your man

Just thought I would try a different point of view. So this is a guy at his wedding and what he is thinking. I think it is good if you read it both ways let me know what you think!

 Walking down the isle with a pretty white smile 

With a pink flower in your hair.

Just can't wait to become your man 

To hold you in my arms.

On such a fine day the preacher did say

We are all gathered here today 

For one of life's greatest moments

Her eyes gave a small little tear.

I kissed my bride and with a smile so wide

I can't believe I found this girl of mine

She's so perfect, kind and wise.

Oh, she has the prettiest eyes.

I show off my new lady 

Oh, how my heart is going crazy.

She drives me wild 

Just with the happiest smile.

I am grateful to be her man

She brings me joy with just her presence.

She has a big heart and is very smart.

I am glad to be taking a part.  

Reviews

[Krista Weiss]

Aww! Really cute poem! Loved it! :)

[InsanityWriter]

Very sweet. (: Well done.

[trainwreck]

This was an excellent perspective change! You handled this piece with grace and eloquence. Good job!

[s y e]

This is excellent! I loved how you write it from a different perspective. Well done, Amanda.

~ Sye

[Tiffany S]

It's certainly an accomplishment to write as the opposite gender! I've never been able to master it, good job!

[Felicity's Eve]

I love it when someone writes in a different point of view. :)

This was very sweet, romantic and very well-written. Lovely :)

100/100

[MandaBear]

thank you!

[Felicity's Eve]

:)