Looks can kill

I took Socrates quote "Beauty is a short lived Tyranny" and turned it into this poem i hope you like it :)

Going out for a night of fun.

Dolling your self up.

The perfect clothes;

The perfect look.

Lips a bight cherry red.

Cheeks a rosy pink.

Eyes sparkling  like glitter.

And your ready to hit the town.

You got your girls 

In the club dancing.

Tonight your letting loose.

Your Beautiful and your gonna have fun.

A boy notices you from across the room.

Your feminine charms are working.

He comes over to see what he can get.

For he has fallen for your spell.

Soon your in each others arms 

Your smothering lipstick between lips.

Hands in each others hair.

Things are heating up.

A wild night is about to pursue.

Now your left with no lip stick on,

With a knife in your back,

And a note by the bed which read......

Beauty is a short lived tyranny.  

Reviews

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

This made me laugh for like a whole two minutes, i very much enjoyed reading this, great write!!!

100/100

[Bryan Micheni]

now that may just be your best write yet

[No name]

OMG I love this !

[etxcp]

really good! Very impresive! (If you don't mind me saying this, i would greatly thank you for making it colorful, and use different fonts! But if you rather it like this, KEEP IT!)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Beauty is a short lived tyranny. " One of the great lines of literature. I believe in the end. We must be happy with what we are and what we need. Beauty will fade away. Real love and friendship grow stronger with time. A excellent poem. I like the story and the strong ending in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Trish D.]

The last stanza, showed the awful consequences...to what seemed an innocent enough bit of fun. Thanks.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

nice twist!

you used the quote real well here

[BikerAngie]

Very good imagery, I could picture this young ladies excitement and the dome she meets. all to for the sake of vanity. Excellent write

[Lily Mae]

Oh Amanda.. wow.. you nailed this so well.. I'm so glad your back writing and enjoying it..because your phenomenal...xo

[Le parisien]

Amanda, what can i tell you i haven't already told you?
Amazing poem, i enjoyed so much ! You never lose your ability to "make us see", all the visual stimuli you gave throughout the poem make us feel like we're inside the scene; also the last stanza giving the moral of the story, that became your signature, you simply master it !! You make them all interesting and original (even when the topic has already been shown from others, like the theme of beauty, and believe me, that's a great quality !!).