Sonnet of Love

I wrote this about someone I like a lot. This is my first attempt at writing a sonnet. I used Shakespeare's ABAB CDCD EFEF GG format. Love or Hate let me know

 Although I have only known you for a week

 Every message you send makes me smile

Your love is what my heart came to seek.

 My love for you will last a great while.

 My lips wish to kiss yours every night.

 I want my body against yours.

 Laying next to you would be a wonderful sight.

 For your looks are what I adore.

 Our souls have become one

 Our bodies now belong to each other

 With you I feel like like i am loved a ton.

For you are my only lover

Baby promise you will always be mine

 I will be ours for all of time

Reviews

[Dennis A. Clark]

Good one.

Can you revise to meet the specific rule for iambic pentameter? Then resubmit.

[Harlon Rivers]

A magnificent expression of emotional connectedness. This sonnet speaks volumes by revealing as much unsaid ardent sentiment between the lines as what is found vividly among them...A fine piece.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful thoughts of love in the poem. I like the way you expressed the desire in this sonnet. A very nice ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Sophie]

Wow, this is really good. Well done!

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

This is really good, the emotions prevail very nicely, well done!! :)

[Mellie]

I feel this way currently. Amazing write :)

[Thrinna Mae]

Wow...You've managed the emotions and expressions here very well...Wonderful work!
:)))

[Ashley Rivers :)]

You can feel the emotions and it's very creative. Great job! :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i can feel your emotions!

great write